Participation by club members ( mình viết lần đầu kiểm tra dùm mình ngữ pháp với cách dùng từ với)

Question

The line graph describes the percentage of club numbers in three different activities in a Uk sports club between 1983 and 2003.

In 1983, around 50% of club numbers came from swimming. As a result, the swimming is the most popular activities. Since then declining significantly at about 15% until 2003.

The figures in team sport began at 33% of club members. It overtook swimming in 1990, making team sports was the highest in three activities. It reached a peak of 40% before its former level.

Only 5% for gym activities, 10 times less than that of swimming. From 1988 to 1998, it rose by  nearly 20% and remained constant at 25% in 2003.

Overall, it is clear that swimming was dropped over the period shown. Surprisingly, the percentage of club members in gym activities rose dramatically and team sport was the most popular.

Answer 1

The line graph describes the percentage of club numbers in three different activities in a Uk sports club between 1983 and 2003. -> biểu đồ miêu tả là tỉ lệ tham gia của thành viên không phải tỉ lệ thành viên 

the percentage of club numbers -> the percentage of participation among club members

Hoặc viết cụ thể hơn -> The line graph describes changes in participation among club members

In 1983, around 50% of club numbers came from swimming -> tương tự, với came from swimming dùng từ hơi gượng ép, cứ went swimming là được.

It reached a peak of 40% before its former level. -> theo mình nhìn hình thì không phải reach a peak, chừng nào cái điểm đó nó như đỉnh hình tam giác thì mới là reach a peak, cả quá trình thay đổi của team sport theo mình thì nên miêu tả là slightly fluctuated.

Answer 2

The line graph describes the percentage of club numbers in three different activities in a Uk sports club between 1983 and 2003. -> biểu đồ miêu tả là tỉ lệ tham gia của thành viên không phải tỉ lệ thành viên 

the percentage of club numbers -> the percentage of participation among club members

Hoặc viết cụ thể hơn -> The line graph describes changes in participation among club members

In 1983, around 50% of club numbers came from swimming -> tương tự, với came from swimming dùng từ hơi gượng ép, cứ went swimming là được.

It reached a peak of 40% before its former level. -> theo mình nhìn hình thì không phải reach a peak, chừng nào cái điểm đó nó như đỉnh hình tam giác thì mới là reach a peak, cả quá trình thay đổi của team sport theo mình thì nên miêu tả là slightly fluctuated.