The charts compare the amount of time spent on (không bao quát hết nghĩa) the level of involving in educational field and scientific reserch in developing nations and developed nations in 1980 and 1990 education and the development of science (bạn cố gắng paraphase) between developing and developed nations within a decade ( số liệu so sánh trong 2 năm cụ thể, không phải suốt 1 thập kỷ) (1980 - 1990).
Overall, the wealthy countries had a higher number of years for schooling than the developing ones did (ngữ pháp) over the period given (không cần thiết).Therefore, the industrialized nations had a higher population of scientists and technicians than the industrializing industrialized nations ones did. Besides, the wealthy nations also expended more money (expended sth in/on) on scientific research than the developing nations ones from 1980 to 1990.
Firstly, with regard to the average years of schooling, people students (không bao quát) in the industrialized countries people spent more time on learning at school than people in developing countries those living in developing countries, increasing increased from approximately 8 to 10 years. However, the figure for developing countries rose from more than 2 to nearly 4 years.
Secondly, in terms of the development of science, the proportion of scientists and technicians in rich countries was higher than that of poor (poor # developing) developing countries, with 41 and 70 per 1000 people in 1980 and 1990, respectively. Nevertheless, although (chỉ dùng 1 từ) the developing nations saw an increase in the number of scientists from 1980 to 1990, the figure for it was not higher than 20 per 1000 people. In addition, the industrialized countries invested more on scientific research over the period shown, rose rising to 350 billion dollars by 1990. However (Sát với nội dung câu hơn) By contrast the figure for developing nations fell from around 50 to 10 billion dollars.
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