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The two diffirent maps indicate an island before the construction and how it changes after some tourists were built .Overall, some buildings, accommodation units and roads  appeared and there are several services for tourists .

The island’s sizes are approximate 250 meters width and 50 meters length .Before the construction ,there are nothing much but trees at the west and the east of the island .

They built a central building of reception and a northen restaurant at the west of the island . A circle track of vehicles  was also built around the reception block and leads to the southern pier where tourists can go sailing . There are 2 groups of accommodation at both west and east side of the reception block. They also built a footpath system connecting buildings of each group. At the west of the island , there is a beach which tourists can swim or enjoy sunshine .

In gerenal , by comparing two maps , there are significant changes of the island after the construction .
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The two diffirent  (differentmaps indicate an island before the construction and how it changes after some tourists (tourist facilities were built (have been built) .Overall, some buildings, accommodation units and roads  appeared and there are several services for tourists .
 
The island’s sizes are approximate 250 meters width and 50 meters length (not necessary b/c there is no change in size) .Before the construction ,there are nothing much but trees at the west and the east of the island . 

They built a central building of reception and a northen restaurant at the west of the island . A circle track of vehicles  was   also built (has been built) around the reception block and leads (led) to the southern pier where tourists can go sailing . There are (were2 groups of accommodation at both west and east side of the reception block. They also built a footpath system connecting buildings of each group. At the west of the island , there is a beach which tourists can swim or enjoy sunshine .


In gerenal , by comparing two maps , there are significant changes of the island after the construction.

I think it's quite good in general, but you should pay attention to tense of verbs

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