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Question

The line graph shows the information about water used in the world from 1900 to 2000while the table chart presents the water consumptioned in Brazill and Congo in 2000

Overall , the line graph the water use for africulture had dramactic upward trend .While , the water comsumptioned in Democratic Repucblic of Congo is the lowest.

It can be seen that the line graph , there was a dramactic rise in the water use for argiculture from 1900 to 2000 from 5 km3 to 3000 km3 .While , the water use for industrial and domestic no change between 1900 and 1940  .However , the water for industrial increased sharply from 1 km3 to 1.000 km over the period 1940 to 2000 . Similarly , the water for domestic saw a slight grow from 1km3 to 3 km3 over a sixty year period .

Turning to the pie charts Brazil had the largest civilian 176 million and the rate of iriigated land of brazill was significant greater than the proportion irrigated land of decocratic republic of congo 25.500 km2 and 100km2 respectively .Like wise , the amount of water comsumption per person of brizil is larger than the figure decocratic republic of congo 359 k3 and 8km3 repestively.

 

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The line graph shows the information about the amount of water used worldwide in the world from 1900 to 2000 while the table chart gives data on the consumption of water presents the water consumptioned in Brazill and Congo in the year 2000

Overall, the line graph (lặp) the water use for africulture had dramactic upward trend (muốn dùng upward/ downward thì nên viết: There was an upward trend in...) .While (cần viết chung vào 1 câu), the amount of water comsumptioned (em bị sai lỗi này chứng tỏ phần Ngữ pháp Trung cấp/ Nâng cao còn yếu) in Democratic Repucblic of Congo was lower (1 là có 3-4 tiêu chí nên không nên chỉ nói 1 yếu tố, water consumption per person) (2 là cách em viết chưa nói rõ được yếu tố nào lower, không phải lowest)  is the lowest.