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The first bar chart shows the proportion of USA marriage and divorce over the period 1970 to 2000 while the second figure presents the information of marital status of adult Americans between 1970 and 2000.

As can be seen from the first garph , the rate of marriages in USA no change from 1970 to 1980 about 2.5 millions .However , there was a sligh drop in the number of marriage from 2.4 millions to 2 millions over a 10 year.In comparision , the rate of divorces in USA grew significantly from 1 millions to 1.4 millions over the period 1970 to 1980 .But there was a remarkable drop and stay the same in the divorces in USA between 1990 and 2000 .

      Turning to the second figure the rate married of adult Americans in 1970 is the highest 70 percent .Likewise the number of adult Americans nerver married in 1970 was significant lower than the adult Americans in 2000 12 % and 20% perspectively .While the group widowed and divorce in 2 years also under 10 percent of adults

     Overall, in the first bar , there was a downward trend in the marriages from 1970 to 2000 meanwhile the next bar the rate of people marital status in 1970 is greatest compares with other status

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Answer 1

Millions ---> Million.

The first bar chart shows the proportion of USA marriage and divorce over the period 1970 to 2000 while the second figure presents the information of marital status of adult Americans between 1970 and 2000.

As can be seen from the first garph , the rate of marriages in USA no change from 1970 to 1980 about 2.5 millions .However , there was a sligh drop in the number of marriage from 2.4 millions to 2 millions over a 10 year.In comparision , the rate of divorces in USA grew significantly from 1 millions to 1.4 millions over the period 1970 to 1980 .But there was a remarkable drop and stay the same at approximate 1 million in the number of divorces in USA between 1990 and 2000  --> in last two years..

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Answer 2

Turning to the second figure the rate married of adult Americans in 1970 is the highest 70 percent .Likewise the number of adult Americans nerver married in 1970 was significant lower than the adult Americans in 2000 12 % and 20% perspectively .While the group widowed and divorce in 2 years also under 10 percent of adults

     Overall, in the first bar , there was a downward trend in the marriages from 1970 to 2000 meanwhile the next bar the rate of people marital status in 1970 is greatest compares with other status   --> Unclear?!?

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The second graph shows the differences of American marital status between 1970 and 2000. It is clear that the figure of married was the highest at above 50% over the time, followed by the number of single. The percentage of people who widowed changed insignificantly between two years at under 10%. Meanwhile, there was a drammatical downward trend in the proportion of married people from 70% in 1970 to under 60% in 2000. By contrast, the figures of people who never married and divorced rised shapely by about 8% to 20% and nearly 10% respectively.

 

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Answer 3

-As can be seen from the first garph , the rate of marriages in USA no change from 1970 to 1980 about 2.5 millions  ===> thiếu động từ
- slight drop...