Ielts cambridge 12 - Test 5 - Task 1

Question

The chart delineates the proportion of Australian who did normal exercise in 2010 in 6 different age groups. Units are measured in percentage.  
Overall, most citizens who were at the age group from 15 to 24 did physical activity, whereas the least amount of men did exercise was group aged from 35 to 44.  
In Australia,  both males and females at the group of age from 15 to 24 did most physical activity at 52.8 and 47.7 respectively. Besides, the rate of men took physical exercise regularly was 42.4 at group of 25-to34-year-olds, roughly 7 less than that for women.  
On the other hand, around 53 of females who did physical exercise at 3 different groups from 35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, higher than these proportion for their opposite gender at approximately 40, 43 and 45 correspondingly. Interestingly, the percentage of Australian who did exercise regularly accounted for nearly 47 for both gender at the group of age from 65 and over. 

Answer 1

1. You wrote: ...n of Australian who did normal exercise in 2010 in 6 different age groups. Units are measure...

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2. You wrote: ...an that for women. On the other hand, around 53 of females who did physical exercise at 3 differen...

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