Question

some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban canters. Do u think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

It is true that some people encourage big companies and industry to be traffered to urban areas that faraway from city. Although there are some benefits, I would argue that threre are more drawbacks.

One the one hand, it isundeniable that the more factories produce the more garbage is released into the environment. As a result, it give rise to pollution in the city where a plenty of residental situated. Due to that, the quality of air is deteriorated and led to negatively impact on citizens health. Moreover, the construction of buildings and factories require for a major land. As a result, a plenty of animal species loss habitat and may become extinct. To illustrate, the thermal power factory in China pollute to the air a huge amount of toxic, it also occupies for thousand hectares which can become accommodation for hundred residents. Having firm outside the city is making itself and citizens more flourish.

On the other hand, I believe that the encouragement is also beneficial. Firstly, as a reason to come to develop cities for employment, employees now can spread out to urban areas. That led to an equally population rate between city and countryside. Furthermore, the movement of big firms may decline overpopulation in many cities. It also open more opportunity for publics who live in countryside to be employed.

To sum up with, despite benefits it brings to residents, factories and industry is far more negatively impact on the environment.

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