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Western countries are well known as the forefront of higher education today. Therefore, many Asean students decide to study abroad after graduating from high school in their home town. Howeve, there are some controversies whether learning abroad is beneficial or not for students. This essay now will examine some advantages as well as disavantages of learning overseas.

Fisrt of all, it is believed that studying abroad can benefit students' job prospect. To illustrate, Western countries have a high quality of education system. They prioritize experience and soft skills rather than theory. Moreover, the university degrees that graduates have are internationally recognized. Therefore, there will be more opportunities for students to find an appropriate jobs in many international companies.

Secondly, learning overseas can economically benefit students. To explain, it cannot be denied that the tuition fees of Western universities are high, however, students might receive more in long term with their investment. In time of globalization, graduates from international universities wil have more chances to promote their positions than others and also have higher salaries.

In contrast, studying abroad can affect students' behavior negatively. The culture of Eastern countries are different from the Western ones, Western people have open-mind and more freedom. Teenagers are not controlled by their parents when they turn 18, then they live independently. Although this life style can help Eastern students become mature and overcome obstacle by themselves, some of them do not have enough knowledge to stay away from social evils.

Secondly, there are now more international companies in Asean countries and RMIT is an example. Students can study in an international environment in their hometown without moving to another strange place. Therefore, if they need help from their parents, they are always willing to do. In addition, it is also easier for parents to take care of their children as well as assure that their students are safe.

In conclusion, there are different perspectives on studying abroad. Students and their family need to consider both benefits and disadvantages of this issue before making a decision. 

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Đề này chưa rõ ràng lắm vì IELTS nó có 7 dạng cụ thể. Bạn kiểm tra lại đề gốc trên mạng nhé.

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Western countries are well known as the forefront of higher education today. Therefore, many Asean students decide to study abroad after graduating from high school in their home town after graduation. Howeve, there are some controversies whether learning abroad is beneficial or not for students. This essay now will examine some advantages as well as disavantages of learning overseas. The topic of... is a controversial one. Some people..., others... This essay will look at...

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Kết Luận, bạn cũng bị dài dòng và đôi khi viết những câu không thật sự gắn kết với chủ đề chính.

In conclusion, it seems to me that studying overseas is both... and...

Thêm một câu kéo theo ngắn thôi là xong, hoặc không cần.

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cảm ơn bạn đã góp ý. Tuy nhiên, cách viết some people think that....while others vì theo ch.trình mình học là k dc viết nên mình viết theo thói quen và cấu trúc đã đc học. Thầy mình nói cách đó kém academic :)

Thầy bạn là Tây thì mình chịu chứ cụm đó là mình lấy của đề IELTS đấy. Chắc đề IELTS nó không được academic.

Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

minh cung thuong thay nhung ban hoc ielts su dung cum tu do! cam on ban :)

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