Bài IELTS Task 1 - Energy produced by different sources in one country in 1985 and 2003
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The given pie charts compare the percentage of energy produced in terms of five different sources in one particular country between two years in 1985 and 2003.

Overall, it is immediately clear that there was an upward trend in proportion of energy produced in Natural gas and coal. Although the production rate of oil and nuclear energy sources saw a decline over the given times, the rate in hydroelectric power still took the lead from the list.

As can be seen from the data, there was slight changes in portion of oil and nuclear sources in 2003. In 1985, the percentage of oil was higher than the figure in 2003, with 52% in 1985 and 39% in 2003. This trend was similar to the figure in nuclear energy which decreased gradually to 17% in 2003.

In contrast, in 2003 the portions of coal and natural gas witnessed a dramartical growth. In 1985, standing at 8% and 13% of total energy produced, a significant increase to 13% and 23% for coal and natural gas, respectively. Finally, the rate of production in hydroelectric power remained stable at 4% in 2003.

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The given pie charts compare the percentage of energy produced in terms of five different sources in one particular country between two years in 1985 and 2003.
 

Overall, it is immediately clear that there was an upward trend in proportion of energy produced in natural gas and coal. Although the production rate of oil and nuclear energy sources saw a decline over the given times, the rate in hydroelectric power still took the lead from the list.

As can be seen from the data, there was were slight changes in portion of oil and nuclear sources in 2003. In 1985, the percentage of oil was higher than the figure in 2003, with 52% in 1985 and 39% in 2003. This trend was similar to the figure in nuclear energy which decreased gradually to 17% in 2003.

In contrast, in 2003 the portions of coal and natural gas witnessed a dramartical dramatical growth. In 1985, standing at 8% and 13% of total energy produced, a significant increase to 13% and 23% for coal and natural gas, respectively. Finally, the rate of production in hydroelectric power remained stable at 4% in 2003.

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The given pie charts compare the percentage of energy produced in terms of five different sources in one particular country between two years in 1985 and 2003.

Nếu dùng compare, bạn nên so sánh nước.

Nếu muốn paraphrase từ show thì phương án đơn giản nhất sẽ là show/ give data/ information on/ about.

Từ tiếp theo cần chú ý là generated/ produced (trên như thế nào dưới bê nguyên và sửa nhẹ). Ngoài ra, bạn có thể viết the amount of ... produced là khác hẳn so với đề bài.

Về vấn đề sources, mình nghĩ đến phương án using five sources of fuels/ fuel sources.

Còn lại là lỗi về năm thì mình góp ý tí là nên viết the two years. Hoặc có thể nhảy thẳng vào between 1985 and 2003

Mình thử: The given pie charts show information about the proportion of energy generated using five sources of energy in one particular country between 1985 and 2003.

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