Some people think that outdoor activities bring beneficial for children's deveopment than playing comuter games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Question

There is currently a contentious argument over whether children will develop completely if they join in extracurricular activities than playing video games. I totally agree with this opinion because the participation in outdoor activities helps children become more active and make friends with others. Moreover, it will improve their social skills.
The main reason why i believe outdoor activities effectedon children because children is still young and they want to play with other people in the same age so they will not be sad or lonely when they go in with. Many children feel lonely and isolated because their parents always busy and they do not take care them. So many parents allow their son to join in some activities are held outdoors. A wide range of children have the same age take part in the same activities, they will easily talk and make friends. To illustrate, my baby's neighbour become more active, usually help her parents do housework.

Another reason why i support the notion that children can improve themselves by participating in some competitions such as marathon, football and basketball. These activities will help them develop comprehensively both physically and mentally. Otherwise, playing computer games can make our eyes are likely to suffer short sightedness and become drier

In conclusion, i completely agree that children can get many benefits for their development from outdoor activities. Given this situation, it seem that a wide range of parents will permit their offspring to participate in some outdoor activities to make them grow absolutely both mentally and physically

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 because the participation in outdoor activities helps children become more active and make friends with others. Moreover, it will improve their social skills.đây là nhiệm vụ của thân bài

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