IELTS Task 1- Test 1- C.A.M 15

Question

The bar chart illustrates the responses of citizens/residents in five different Australian cities about their preference to consume a different types of coffee.

          Overall, the majority of people in Australia went to a café for tea or coffee in the last 4 weeks. Sydney and Melbourne are the two cities that have the largest number of people buying tea and coffee.

          In Sydney, there was around 43.7% of people drinking fresh coffee, compared with more than 45% of those who enjoyed drinking instant coffee. However, there was only 34% of people buying fresh coffee in Brisbane . The highest percentage of citizens going for a café belonged to Melbourne city, at nearly 65% whereas this figure in Sydney was about 61% and only 55% in Brisbane went to a café.

         Although in Hobart, the volume of people having a coffee in a café was as high as the figure for Sydney, the figure for Adelaide accounted for the lowest, at under 50%. The figure for instant coffee in Adelaide and Hobart was 50% and about 54% respectively. Meanwhile the percentage of fresh coffee consumers remained at low levels in both cities, at under 40%.

Answer 1

The bar chart illustrates the responses of citizens/residents in five different Australian cities about to (cấu trúc là response to nhé) their preference to consume a different types of coffee.

          Overall, the majority of people in Australia went to a café for tea or coffee in the last 4 weeks. Sydney and Melbourne are the two cities that have the largest number of people buying purchasing tea and coffee.

          In Sydney, there was around 43.7% percent (lưu ý đừng dùng ký hiệu nhé) of people drinking fresh coffee, compared with to more than 45% of those who enjoyed drinking instant coffee. However, there was only 34% of people buying fresh coffee in Brisbane . The highest percentage of citizens going for a café belonged to Melbourne city, at nearly 65% whereas this figure in Sydney was about 61% and only 55% in Brisbane went to a café.

         Although While in Hobart, the volume of people having a coffee in a café was as high as the figure for Sydney, the figure for Adelaide accounted for the lowest, at under 50%. The figure for of people buying instant coffee  in Adelaide and Hobart was 50% and about 54% respectively. Meanwhile the percentage of fresh coffee consumers in all mentioned cities remained at low levels in both cities, at under 40%.

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