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Question

The table depicts the data of seven diffrent functions of mobile phones had been used between 2006 and 2010.

Throughout this period, making calls was the most viral function of mobile phones and there was a pronounced increase in the popularity of other mobile phone functions.

In 2006, 100% of moble phone users used their phone to contact and this percentage remained relatively stable over the 4-year period. Taking photos was the second most popular function, which slightly increased by 10% from 2006 to 2010. Similar trends could be seen in sending and recieving text messages and playing music, which witnessed slight increases by 6% and 14% respectively.

There were many considerably innovations had been seen in ratios of other usages. In 2006, there was no data about the usages of SEarching the Internet and Recording video. After 2 year, he number of people who used mobile phones to record video stood at 9%  and it was fourfold in 2010. In terms of search for the Internet and playing games, these figures had risen dramatically over the 4-year period, from 41% to 73% and 17% to 42% respectively.

Answer 1

The table depicts the data of seven diffrent functions of mobile phones had been used between 2006 and 2010. 

-> relative clause-> used, mà ko ai lại dùng past perfect ở đây

Throughout this period, making calls was the most viral function of mobile phones and there was a pronounced increase in the popularity of other mobile phone functions.

-> nên thêm chữ overall ở đầu câu. Dùng structure: witnessed/ saw an increas/decrease, synonyms của increase/decrease

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