Many educators argue that the current system of specialized high schools may promote unhealthy competition or unnecessary stress among students, many others have praised the merits of those schools

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Many people think that the current system high schools for the gifted should not be maintained because that may promote unhealthy competitions or unnecessary stress among students, but others do not agree. Personally, this kind of education system should be maintained because of bringing advantages to both students and society

To begin with, specialized high schools take part in not only developing not only students' brains and physical health. To enter specialized high schools, students have to take such difficult entrance examinations. So, these high schools include good students from all districts. As a result, students in specialized high schools have great opportunity to communicate wwith excellent students, have chance to learn experience from their classmates. High schools for the gifted also provide experienced teachers, help students study scientifically and easily reach the prizes of all national and international contests. Besides, specialized high schools have suitable equipment and space for students to train their bodies in spare time. As I have mentioned. studying at specialized high schools helps student develope overall, including brains and physical health.

The other undeniable thing is that specialized high schools contribute to improving our society. As you know, this kind of school is considered as good places for training excellent persons. In the near future, these people graduate from high schools and show their talents to develope nation's conomy. Or  when finish high schools, they go to studying abroad and then bring the experience they have learnt to enhance the country's economy. As a result, the country becomes stronger and living standard also increase.

Taking everything into consideration, I can say that specialized high schools are the best studying environment. In the modern society as todays, students should try hard to be entered high-quality scholl.

Answer 1

Many people think that the current system high schools for the gifted should not be maintained because that may promote unhealthy competitions or unnecessary stress among students, but others do not agree. Personally, this kind of education system should be maintained (repeated => the government should bolster this kind of education system) because of bringing advantages since it yields a range of advantages to both students and society.

To begin with, specialized high schools take part in not only developing not only students' brains and but also physical health. To enter specialized high schools, students have to take (repeated => excel in) such difficult entrance examinations in an attempt to be able to enter gifted high schools. So, since these high schools include good (overused => exceptional) students from all districts. As a result, students in specialized high schools (repeated => magnet schools) have opportunities to communicate with excellent students, have chance to or to learn experience from their classmates. Highschools for the gifted also provide experienced teachers, help students study scientifically, and easily (overused => competently) reach the prizes of all national and international contests. Besides, specialized high schools have suitable equipment and space for students to train their bodies in their spare time. As I have mentioned, studying at specialized high schools helps students develope overall, including brains and physical health.

The other undeniable thing is that specialized high schools contribute to improving our society. As you know, this kind of school is considered as good (overused => proper) places for training excellent persons(individuals). In the near future(wordy => Shortly), these people will graduate from high schools and show their talents to develope the national economy. Or when they finish high schools(repeated => their academic years), they would go to studying abroad and then bring the experiences they have learnt to enhance the country's economy. As a result, the country(repeated => their nations) become stronger(overused => more prosperous) as well as increase residents' living standards.

Taking everything into consideration, I can say that specialized high schools are the best studying environment. In this modern society, as todays, students should try hard to be entered make an entrance into high-quality schools.