Bài IELTS Task 2 sáng 23/7- IDP Hồ Chí Minh-education

Question

Some experts believe that it's better for people to begin learning a foreign language at primary school than a secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, studying abroad become one of the most popular trends for most people in many countries over the world. While I accept the idea that studying overseas can have many drawbacks, I believe that advantages outweigh disadvantages for a number of reasons.

On the one hand, studying abroad can allow individuals to practice their foreign language skills on a daily basis. It can be explained by the fact that staying in another country can help people to interact and communicate with native people regularly, which is difficult for them to do in their motherland. As a result, people who are good at languages tend to have more chances to develop their career as well as their social life. In addition, if they live in their home country instead of living in a foreign country, they often spend much more time and money learning other languages. For example, according to a scientist, he have compared a person studying in the United State with one studying English in Viet Nam, he have realized that a first person was a more precise English speaker as well as a more proper English writer.

Oh the other hand, studying overseas also has many negative impacts on personal life. Firstly, the language barrier which can prevent people living in other countries from interacting and communicating with other people can be a difficult problem. Therefore, not only can this result in misunderstandings but also misinterpretations between people. Secondly, studying a foreign country can make people consuming too much money which probably plays an important role in their life. This is because, the cost of housing in abroad is likely to be more expensive than in home country. For instance, according to researchers, the average rent in the Taiwan is 4 times higher in Viet Nam.

In conclusion, the emergence of migration to other countries for education can have both benefits and drawbacks, however I believe that the advantages are far more than the disadvantages.

 

 

Answer 1

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CRITERIA	GRADE	COMMENT
Task Achievement	6	• addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than others • presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitive • presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear
Coherence and Cohesion	5	• presents information with some organization but there may be a lack of overall progression • attempts to use cohesive devices, but cohesion within and between sentences may be faulty or mechanical • may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately • uses paragraphing, but not always logically
Lexical Resource	6	• uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task • attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy • makes some errors in spelling and word formation
Grammatical Range and Accuracy	6	• uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms • makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication
Overall	6.0