Bài IELTS Task 2 25/4/2019 - IDP Hồ Chí Minh - In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or small family units...

Question

The society is changed in term of time in technology, education, means of communication which lead human to tend to make their own new lifestyle become different in comparision with the past and there has a difference from countryside to city. When citizens move to the city, they often live separately or in nuclear family instead of staying with their relative or family. This depends on their own mind but there have advantage and disadvantage effect constantly.

Firstly, the benefits when we select to live peaceful in modern family or alone. Making sure that we can concentrate on our work or studying efficiently because there is no-one live with us and we can do anything in spacious space such as staying up late in inviting our friends , making own decisions and creating own rule. Moreover, for small family units, when they have a baby or young children that their son are given better education opportunities. Their child can access to new educational method and ideal environment to be creative and develop their natural skills, which is consisted in their instance as having a chance to study abroad, gaining international qualifications and ensuring them a better job after graduation.

Secondly, the drawback effects when we do not live in the extended - family. They will not be only isolation when they return from their office or university but also experience feeling of loneliness. Therefore, this can be impact on their mental issiues and in case of emergency as a heart attack, for example, which cause in great danger. At the same time, the parents have to be worked from dawn to dusk will be less time for their childen in bringing up and even their sons can suffer many serious problems in society such as house's accident or kidnap status. Without parents regard and guide, one of main reason make children engaged in criminal activites such as illegal drug use or unlawful gambling that ruining their career. 

In conclusion, there has pros and cons influences significantly affect to living method and in my opinion, living with big extended family that gives far more benefits.

Answer 1

"This depends on their own mind but there have advantage and disadvantage effect constantly." -> "effects" nha bạn

Answer 2

Source:https://s3-ap-southeast-1.amazonaws.com/ielts.forums/Family-B%C3%A0i-ielts-task-2-25.4.2019.docx

CRITERIA	GRADE	COMMENT
Task Achievement	6	• addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than others • presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitive • presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear
Coherence and Cohesion	5.0	• presents information with some organisation but there may be a lack of overall progression • makes inadequate, inaccurate or over use of cohesive devices • may be repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution • may not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate
Lexical Resource	5.0	• uses uses a limited range of vocabulary, but this is minimally adequate for the task • may make noticeable errors in spelling and/or word formation that may cause some difficulty for the reader
Grammatical Range and Accuracy	5.0	• uses only a limited range of structures • attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences • may make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader
Overall	5.5

 

Đăng ký Premium IELTS để được chữa 5 bài/tuần : https://ieltsplanet.info/gioi-thieu-goi-premium-ielts/?source=baichuawritingmienphi