[WRITING TASK 1] The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups

Question

The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

The table demonstrates and compares how many hours the residents of different ages spend on six categories of recreational activities in Canada annually.

Overall, over a year, Canadian of all age groups contribute the largest amount of time to watch TV/videos but only little time to go to the movie theater. Besides, teenagers and young adults waste more time on communication with over-four-people group than others. It is reported that youngster participate in group sport more than the elderly.

Watching television takes juvenile and people in seventies over 1000 hours but others less than half period, especially people in thirties with only 400 hours. Social communication with less-than-four only consume 150 hours of both teenagers and young adults but over 200 hours each other group. Instead, the under 30’s group spend 350 hours a year on interaction with over-four-people social group, this period is further than 50 hours spent by 40’s and 50’s group and 25 hours spent by middle-aged and older group. Regarding group exercise, teenagers give up 450 hours for it while the elderly over 60 barely do this. Beyond, Canadians see movies only 25 to 100 hours each year, mostly by teenagers.

 

  

Answer 1

contribute to watching TV not contribute to watch TV

the outline of body : para1: watching TV/ videos >< cinemas

                   para2: group exercise and socialising with 4 or more people

                   para3: others

is more relevant

Answer 2

Link: https://s3-ap-southeast-1.amazonaws.com/ielts.forums/Revised-Task-1-Table-graph.docx

CRITERIA	GRADE	COMMENT
Task Achievement	6	• covers all requirements of the task • expresses a position but the development is not always clear and there may be no conclusions drawn • presents relevant main ideas but they are limited and not sufficiently developed
Coherence and Cohesion	6	• presents information with some organization but there may be a lack of overall progression • makes inadequate, inaccurate use of cohesive devices • may be repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution
Lexical Resource	6	• uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task • attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy • makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication
Grammatical Range and Accuracy	5	• uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms but the complex structures tend to be less accurate than simple ones. • makes frequent errors in grammar and punctuation is faulty; errors cause some difficulty for the reader
Overall	5.5