My hobby essay in English - Describe your hobby and interests

Question

Hobby is one of the most important things we should have in our life. Of all hobbies in the world, I like listening to music the most. I enjoy music and I listen to it every single day. I started this hobby when I was 8. There are various kinds of music such as Pop, Folk music, Hip hop, ... for you to choose and enjoy. If I'm in good mood, I prefer to listen to some rock music that keep me happy and full of energy. If I'm sad or tired, I choose some calm, relaxing songs. Music can speak, through music, people can express feelings and emotions. Each song has it own message. My favourite songs is "A thousand years" written by Christina Perri. It's from "Twilight" - a famous movie about the relationship between human teenager and vampire. There are also a lot of bands in US, UK, Japan, Korea, ... such as One Direction, Fifth Harmony, Westlife, ... and a lot of singers. They wrote their songs through their experience and by their heart. Most of the time, I love listening to music to relax my body. Music can make the world smaller. Without music, life would be a mistake.

Answer 1

Hobby is one of the most important things we should have in our life. Of all hobbies in the world, I like listening to music the most. I enjoy music and I listen to it every single day. I started this hobby when I was 8. There are various kind kinds of music such as Pop, Folk music, Hip hop, ... for you us to choose and enjoy. If  Whenever I'm in good  a good mood, I prefer to listen to some rock music that keep keeps me happy and full of energy energetic. If I'm sad or tired, I choose some calm, relaxing  therapeutic songs. Music can speak, because/ ; through music, people can express feelings and emotions. Each songs has it own message. My favourite songs is "A thousand years" written by Christina Perri. It's from "Twilight" - a famous movie about the relationship between a human teenager and a vampire. There are also a lot of band bands in the US, UK, Japan, Korea, ... such as One Direction, Fifth Harmony, Westlife, ... and a lot of singers. They wrote their songs through based on their experience and by their heart  even from the bottom of their heart. Most of the time, I love listening to music to relax my body mind. Music can make the world smaller. Without music, life would be a mistake  (??)