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There are a lot of well-known personalities around the globe. Anna is the one who appeals to me the most. She is my idol because she has the potential to be a fantastic vocalist. She is a Vietnamese singer. She was the first-season winner of the reality television show Star Academy Vietnam. According to the public, Anna is a young Vietnamese female singer with a powerful and exquisite voice. Beside, Anna also is a TV celebrity who is adored by fans for her live performances and her wit on game programs and chat shows. She could be a lovely young lady with long black hair and a captivating smile in terms of appearance. But she was a shy girl who avoided interacting with outsiders at first. Because of her performance, I favor her. I really appreciate the way she sings and communicates the emotion of her song. She is dedicated to providing high-quality music products at all times. She is remembered by all of her fans for her commitment and sense of humor. She could also be a kind-hearted woman who is always willing to help others. She has also dedicated her time to attempting to participate in a variety of charitable activities to assist the poor, the sick, and the homeless. She has the potential to be an excellent leader. She could be a good leader for teens to follow. Perhaps I like everything about her. That’s why I love it such a lot. She could be a shining example on behalf of me to follow.
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There are a lot of well-known personalities around the globe world, and Anna is the one who appeals to me the most. She is my idol because I love her because she has the potential to be a fantastic vocalist. She is a Vietnamese singer. She was the first-season winner of the reality television show Star Academy Vietnam. According to the public, Anna is a young Vietnamese female singer with a powerful and exquisite voice. Beside, Anna also is also a TV celebrity who is adored by fans for her live performances and her wit on game programs and chat shows.
Wile She could be a lovely young lady with long black hair and a captivating smile in terms of appearance. But she was a shy girl who avoided interacting with outsiders at first. (vi sao doan nay dung past simple the?)
 
Because of her performance, I favor her. I really appreciate the way she sings and communicates the emotion of her song. She is dedicated to providing high-quality music products at all times. She is remembered by all of her fans for her commitment and sense of humor. She could also be a kind-hearted woman who is always willing to help others. She has also dedicated her time to attempting to participate in a variety of charitable activities to assist the poor, the sick, and the homeless. She has the potential to be an excellent leader. She could be a good leader for teens to follow. Perhaps I like everything about her. That’s why I love it such a lot. She could be a shining example on behalf of for me to follow. (on behalf of la thay mat cho ai nhe)
 
bài của bạn hơi lộn xộn, nếu là phần speaking thì mình nghĩ bạn nên sắp xếp lại cho dễ nhớ:
- who is the person? (name,...)
- The reasons why you and other fans like her.
*Appealing appearance
* Her talent
* Her qualities.
- her achievement.
 
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