IELTS TASK 1 _ The bricks manufacturing process. Mong mọi người nhận xét nhiệt tình ạ! mình cảm ơn nhìu !

Question

The flow chart describes how bricks are manufactured in the construction sector.It is evident that there are 7 stages included in this process, from the initial the collection of raw material to the eventual transport of the finished goods.

At the first stage in this process, clay which is dug from these ground will be evenly filtered through the mental grid to the roller.Afterwards, the roller conveys the broken clay to the next phases where water and sand are added to shape bricks.The bricks formation can be undertaken with the use of either mould or wire cutte.In the following step, the blocks of bricks will be arranged together in an oven to dry for maximum 2 days.Next, the stacks of bricks will go through a heating in a kiln with two different setting.They will be heated at a moderate and then at a higher level.After undergoing the heating process, the bricks are continued to cool down via a cooling chamber at least 2 days. Finally, the bricks are wrapped up in order to be delivered to site constructions.

 

Answer 1

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Answer 2

Bài bạn viết tốt. Mình có 1 số góp ý sau

1. Bạn nên chia thành 2 đoạn văn body để rõ ý và được điểm bố cục

2. Chú ý chủ động bị động và giới từ. Ví dụ trong câu: the bricks are continued to cool down via a cooling chamber at least 2 days 

thì continue phải được dùng ở thể chủ động. Với cả giới từ phải là "in a cooling chamber" và "for at least 2 days" 

 

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