IELST task 1

Question

country	thermal	hydro	nuclear	geothermal and other	total
france	38.1	61.6	374.3	2.6	476.6
germany	335.8	17.2	168.1	9.9	524.7
norway	0.7	108.7	0.	0.3	109.6
spain	89.4	34.3	52.5	2.3	178.5
uk	226.5	4.1	89.3	6.0	325.9

the following table shows the sources of generate elcetricity for five european countries.Write a report describinf the informatin shown below.(at least 150 words)

 

This report describe the suppplies from which five european countries produce electricity 

In general,Germany iuses s highest number of sources of generate electricity.Whereas,Norway use them the least of five european countries.

According to the provide table,thermal power is widely used for the production of electricity in Germany and the UK.In both countries it shows more than fitty percent of the total electricity generated.Whereasmusing thermal in Norway is relatively low which represents less than 1times compared to Germany in total.However,it is worth mentoning that Norway use hydropower the most of five european countries...Compared to Norway,Germany and the UK make little use of hydropower.

Nuclear plants are the main source of electricity for France.Such countries as germany ,Spain and the UK also produce nuclear power ,however,with the considerably low percent compared to their total amounts,Norway seems not to use any nuclearpower.Geothermal and other alternative sources of generated electricit are used at a percentage of no more than two percent in all cases

It is clear that from the data given that there are dramatical difference in using the sources of generated electricity

Answer 1

Chào bạn, mình có một số góp ý cho bạn. Bài viết của bạn nhìn chung đầy đủ và cung cấp những chi tiết cần thiết  

đoạn đầu tiên, "This report describes" nha bạn. Tiếp theo, "Germany uses" nha.

Nếu bạn dùng "The given table" thay vì "provide chart" sẽ hay hơn. 

Chữ mention của bạn thiếu "i" . Bạn để ý phía trước however là dấu chấm.

Mình nghĩ bạn nên kỹ hơn về việc đặt dấu câu vì nó có thể ảnh hưởng đến cách hiểu của người đọc.   

"There is an obvious difference in the use of generated electricity sources" ở đoan cuối nhé

 

This report describes the suppplies from which five european countries produce electricity 

In general,Germany uses the highest number of sources of generate electricity.Whereas,Norway use them the least of five european countries.

According to the provide table,thermal power is widely used for the production of electricity in Germany and the UK.In both countries it shows more than fitty percent of the total electricity generated.Whereasmusing thermal in Norway is relatively low which represents less than 1times compared to Germany in total.However,it is worth mentioning that Norway uses hydropower the most of five european countries...Compared to Norway,Germany and the UK make little use of hydropower.

Nuclear plants are the main source of electricity for France.Such countries as germany ,Spain and the UK also produce nuclear power ,however,with the considerably low percent compared to their total amounts,Norway seems not to use any nuclearpower.Geothermal and other alternative sources of generated electricity are used at a percentage of no more than two percent in all cases

It is clear that from the data given that There is an obvious difference in the use of generated electricity sources