bai viet IELTS task 2- Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and international attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree this opinion?

Question

The last recent decades have seen enormous charges in tourism aspect of most countries on over the world. However, going along with such development, tourism also exists many issues, one of them being a matter of argument today is that whether international tourists should pay the extra fee than local ones for cultural and historical attractions or not.

To begin with, it can be argue that there are some drawbacks of increasing the ticket price for foreign tourists in famous destinations. First of all, it may create discrimination among them and lead to misunderstanding because in these places, abroad travelers and local people are provided the same services, so why they have to pay more money than native visitors; they may think that the owners of these wonderful sites are abusing them. Similarly, the discriminatory pricing may be hurt their heart, which seems they are not welcomed by this country. Moreover, thanks to the holiday of foreign people, host countries collect a considerable amount of money through tax system and additional services like goods, food, souvenirs, accommodation and so on. Therefore, it is unfair to ask them for extra entrance fee that makes them decrease their excitement when travelling. This satisfaction can result in the reduction of tourists, what affects dramatically on country’s economy for a long run.

Nevertheless, viewed from different angles, the extra fee also brings some benefits for both tourists and the host country. It can be denied that the more money they spend, the better services are. The owners of cultural and historical attractions can take advantage of the money to protest the safety of these places in perfect conditions and improve the quality of services provided for overseas visitors like language, headphones, brochures and tourist guides so that they feel completely satisfied. Besides, the government can get more profits from the extra money to benefit the society and citizens in the developing countries especially.

In conclusion, on my view, increasing the price for foreign tourists in cultural and historical heritages should depend on the quality of services they provide visitors. However, I think that we have to treat international travelers as equally as we can to create the good impression on our country’s image.

Answer 1

The last recent decades have seen enormous charges changes in tourism aspect of most countries on /in all over the world. However, going along with such development, tourism also exists brings many issues, one of them being a matter of argument today is that whether international tourists should pay the extra fee than local ones for cultural and historical attractions or not.( Mình chưa thấy bạn nói về bạn theo hướng nào)

To begin with, it can be argued that there are some drawbacks of increasing the ticket price for foreign tourists in famous destinations. First of all, it may create discrimination among them and lead to misunderstanding because in these places, abroad travelers and local people are provided the same services, so why they have to pay more money than native visitors; they may think that the owners of these wonderful sites are abusing them. Similarly, the discriminatory pricing may be hurt their heart, which seems they are not welcomed by this country. Moreover, thanks to the holidays of foreign people, host countries collect a considerable amount of money through tax system and additional services like goods, food, souvenirs, accommodation and so on. Therefore, it is unfair to ask charge them for an extra cost that makes them decrease their excitement when travelling. This satisfaction can result in the reduction of tourists, what affects dramatically on country’s economy for a long run.

Nevertheless, viewed from different angles, the extra /additional fees also brings some benefits for both tourists and the host countries. It can be denied that the more money they spend, the better services are. The owners of cultural and historical attractions these sites could can take advantage of the money to protest the safety of for these places in perfect conditions and improve the quality of services provided for overseas visitors like language, headphones, brochures and tourist guides so that they feel completely satisfied. Besides, the governments can get more profits from the extra money to benefit the society and citizens in the developing countries especially.

In conclusion, on my view, increasing the price for foreign tourists in cultural and historical heritages should depend on the quality of services they provide visitors. However, I think that we have to treat international travelers well so as to we can to create the good impression on for our countries.

Theo mình nghĩ, bạn viết quá dài, chắc là mới học viết..như mình mới bắt đầu lúc trước. Viết rất dài và sai rất nhiều. Ielts ko quan trọng ý lắm( logics tí là dc), quan trọng ngôn ngữ hơn.

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Answer 2

The last recent decades have seen enormous charges in tourism aspect of most countries on over the world. However, going along with such development, tourism also exists many issues, one of them being a matter of argument today is that whether international tourists should pay the extra fee than local ones for cultural and historical attractions or not.

=> Đây là dạng bài Opinion. Cần nêu chính kiến bản thân ở ngay mở bài. 

=> có nhiều cụm chưa sáng nghĩa như là enormous charges in tourism aspect. => charges thành changes và thay aspect thành industry, most countries on over the world thành almost all over the world. 

=> Bạn sửa lại câu 2 ;thành câu nêu quan điểm bản thân cho rõ ràng

To begin with, it can be argue => argued that there are some drawbacks of increasing the ticket price for foreign tourists in famous destinations. First of all, it may create discrimination among => against them and lead to misunderstanding because in these places, abroad travelers and local people are provided the same services, so why => it is unreasonable that they have to pay more money than native visitors; they may think that the owners of these wonderful sites are abusing them => câu này có thể bỏ. Similarly, the discriminatory pricing may be hurt their heart, which seems they are not welcomed by this country. Moreover, thanks to the holiday of foreign people => diễn đạt thiếu tự nhiên, host countries collect a considerable amount of money through tax system and additional services like goods, food, souvenirs, accommodation and so on. Therefore, it is unfair to ask them for extra entrance fee that makes them decrease => may reduce their excitement when travelling. This satisfaction => dissatisfaction can result in the reduction of => a decline in the number of overseas tourists, what affects => will possibly affect the country’s economy dramatically for a long run. => in the long run

Nevertheless, viewed from different angles, the extra fee also brings some benefits for both tourists and the host country. It can be denied that the more money they spend, the better services are. The owners of cultural and historical attractions can take advantage of the money to protest => ensure the safety of these places in perfect conditions => bỏ and improve the quality of services provided for overseas visitors like language, headphones, brochures and tourist guides so that they feel completely satisfied. Besides, the government can get more profits from the extra money to benefit the society and citizens in the developing countries especially.

=> Đoạn này diễn đạt kiểu bị chắc chắn quá =))))

In conclusion, on => in  my view, increasing the price for foreign tourists in cultural and historical heritages should depend on the quality of services they provide visitors. However, I think that we have to treat international travelers as equally as we can to create the good impression on our country’s image.