IELTS Task 2 - Topic: MUSIC

Question

Topic: There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found over the world. Music is a vital part of our lives for a wide range of reasons and I would argue that traditional music is as important as international music.

To begin with, there is the number of reasons why music plays an indispensable part of human’s lives. Firstly, it is a simply entertaining activity which accompanies all of us from the early age. Music is an effective tool that helps us release stress, relax and unwind as well as temporarily ease burden. Without this mode of entertainment, people would be sunk into boredom. In addition, music contributes significantly to learning new languages. For example, it is widely recognized that learning English through music is one of the best way to master this kind of language.

Personally, I strongly believe that international music and traditional music have an equal value in producing various spiritual values for all of us. While particular music of a country sticks with the development of that nation and reflexes uniqueness as well as identical culture, popular music has highly-entertained characteristics that help all people to connect together.

In conclusion, music is one of the most essential parts of human existence, and I believe that international music is as notable as traditional music in our daily lives.

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Answer 1

It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found over the world. Music is a vital part of our lives for a wide range of reasons and I would argue that traditional music is as important as international music.

To begin with, there are a number of reasons why music plays an indispensable part/role of human’s lives. Firstly, it is a simply entertaining activity which accompanies all of us from the early age. Music is an effective tool that helps us release stress, relax and unwind as well as temporarily ease burden. Without this type of entertainment, people would sink into boredom. In addition, music contributes significantly to learning new languages. For example, it is widely recognized that learning English through music is one of the best ways to master this kind of language.

Personally, I strongly believe that international music and traditional music are equal in producing various spiritual values for all of us. While particular music of a country sticks with the development of that nation and reflexes its uniqueness as well as identical culture, popular music has highly-entertained characteristics that help all people to connect together.

In conclusion, music is one of the most essential parts of human existence, and I believe that international music is as notable as traditional music in our daily lives.

Overall

A little short for writing task 2(at least 250w). Lack of ideas. Need at least 2 sentences for your conclusion. Avoid repetition and try to paraphrase. Vocabulary wisely chosen. Keep up!