Mình đi sâu chính vào logic và mạch lạc các ý nhé:
In 1995, fifty eight countries has made mutual agreement in dismissing death penalty,. Since then, this has becoming a conspicious problem and sparked off numerous debates around the world. I would agree that there is a famous opinion stating that death penalty (capital punishment, bạn nên parapharse) is not different from committing murder In a degree, I agree with this statement.
There is no deny It is clear that living is one of the most basic right of a human being, it It means that no one, despite their power or authority, can end the life of another we have no right to take another human life. Therefore, if a guilty person is sentenced to death, he is certainly murdered by the society. He does not die by his will, die of diseases or pass away naturally. Life itself is inherent to human being. Hence, it is unnaturally and inhumane to punish people by death and to take away their unknown future. (đoạn này bạn nên dùng câu ghép và phức thì tốt hơn là các câu đơn và ngắn, mình chưa biết phải sửa chỗ này thế nào cho hay hơn)
The moral perspective of death penalty has caused the rapid growth in the number of countries which agreed to dismiss this type of punishment. According to recent related articles, two-third out of the total number of countries around the world now only sentence the muderers to a life in prison. This list includes many developed countries such as France, Germany, Denmark, and United Kingdom. And there is a grow body of evidence that the disposal of death penalty does not cause any rise in the criminal rate in these nations. (vì bạn completely agree với cái topic này, nên detail 2 bạn nên nêu thêm 1 lý do khác để thuyết phục hơn, đoạn này bạn nên cắt bớt và ghép với đoạn trên thì phù hợp hơn, ví dụ: executing prisoners creates a violent culture and encourage revenge,...)
Another reason for dismissing death penalty is rather simple. What if the guilty person turns out to be not guilty after his punishment has been done? In adition, innocent people could be wrongly conviected and executed because the process of investigation and prosecution is, no doubt, not always follwing the right path. Consequently, the verdict of the jugde and the jury in those cases would leave many regret for the people involved. (bạn có thể thêm example về số lượng vụ án oan, để khẳng định về đáng tiếc khi nếu xử oan cho người ta). Moreover, there are many cases in which the families of the murdered victim have plead for the murderer (killer... paraphase nhé), even though they are going through great depression after losing their loved one, they still do not forget their humnaity. A pitiful mother who lost their daughter, for example, due to homicide said in the court that she did not wish for want another mother to be lost her beloved son, therefore, she asked the judge not sentence the killer to death capital punishment .
Conclusion????
-> bạn thiếu Conclusion, đoạn phía trên dùng hơi nhiều câu đơn, nên dùng câu ghép và phức thì tốt hơn, nên linh hoạt parapharse nhiều những từ có liên quan đến topic hơn nữa, những cái ví dụ của bạn hơi dài và thường viết ra thành 1 đoạn, mình nghĩ bạn nên đưa ví dụ ngắn gọn hơn và lồng nó vào cùng đoạn với luận cứ.