bai ielts task 1- cambridge các pro chữa hộ e vs

Question

 

 

The bar chart shows the average price of a house in the UK in different years. The pie chart shows the percentage between  owners, people renting and those with second homes.(đề bài)

 

The given bar chart illustrates the medium fee of an accommodation in the uk during 1980-2005 period while the pie chart provides the information about the proportion between owners, people renting and those with the second houses.

It can be seen clearly from the chart is that the figure for average price of a houses deceased yearly over 25 years. There was a slight rise in the medium amount of money for a house from nearly 25,000 to above 30,00 in 1985 which was followed by an increase  sharply by under 25,000 in 1990. The medium  spending on an accommodation in 2000 was increase double  than 1990, it continued to rise until it reached the highest amount which was ever recorded with slightly under 20,000 in the last year.

Moving to the pie chart, the figure for renting ranked  the greatest percent between 1985 and 1995 with 59% and 53%, respectively, but then it fell dramatically to 44% in 2005. On the other hand, the percentage of owners grew gradually from 34% to 37% in 1995 and  53% in 2005. Likewise, the quantity of the second homes increase at first to 10% during 10 years, but then fell sharply by 7% in 2005.

Overall, the spectacularly grow in the figure for average price of a house in the UK created a great fell on the proportion of people renting  and having the second home in 2005.

  

các bác cho e hỏi viết ntn thì đc band mấy?

 

Answer 1

an accommodation tức là chỉ có một căn hộ :3 => the accommodation

đoạn body 2 cần có 1 câu overview cho đoạn, cấu trúc b sử dụng chưa đa dạng nó hầu như chỉ là tăng/giảm frm..to.../by../to... chưa có sử dụng cấu trúc so sánh

Comments

đề bài nó là số ít mà "average price of a house"

Answer 2

à còn từ vựng, bạn chưa paraphrase được từ như people renting chẳng hạn, và chưa sử dụng được từ nào đắt giá