Task 1: chart and table "Land degradation"

Question

 

The pie chart highlights how much percentage 4 factors has contributed to lessen agricultural land’s productivity and the tables indicates theirs influence on three regions of the world over a decade since 1990.

Overall, there were 3 chief causes of farmland degration which were deforestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing and Europe represented for the regions which had spoiled land at most compared to the other two.

The pie chart illustrates 4 reasons, in which over-grazing was spearheading a drive to destroy farmland over the period with 35 percent. Widespreading clearing of trees made up for  nearly one third and the over-use of crop constituted over a quarter.

The table shows that Europe had the highest percentage of farmland degenerated by deforestation and over-cultivation with 9.8 and 7.7 respectively. However, when it comes to over-grazing column, 11.3 percent of agricultural land in Oceania was deteriorated by such cause which was the highest figure at that time. Besieds, the table also reflects that only a small percentage of North America’s land was less productive at 5 percent.

 

 

 

Answer 1

Bài của bạn rất hay

Mình chỉ có góp ý nhỏ là ở đoạn đầu ''percentage 4 factors'' sửa lại là ''percentage of four factors'' và bạn k nên viết tắt trong bài viết của mình

Cấu trúc lặp còn nhiều

''The pie chart illustrates''

''the pie chart highlights''

''The table shows''

 

có thể thử cấu trúc khác như ''it can be clearly seen'' hay ''Given is that''

Hơn nữa cụm ''the table shows'' có xuất hiện trong đề. bạn cần paraphrase lại nha ^^