bài task 2 ngày 18/3/2014 -Some argue that all young children should be required to stay with full time education at least 18 years old. Do you agree or disagree?

Question

There is a growing recognition that education is essential to the stability and development of a country. Therefore, it can be argued that young children should achieve the general education until the least age of 18. In my view, it is not entirely true.

To begin with, advocates of this believe that aging 18 which is the fundamental stage to demonstrate the maturity of individual. In comparison with older people, young children might be more likely to be vulnerable due to not full-educated. As a result, their mental and self- controllability make it difficult for them to control their actions as well as can not decide their future. More importantly, without general knowledge, they are insufficient ability to join the workforce.

However, it is also possible to make a opposing case. It is often argued that in fact there are several challenges for young children and their families to achieve the level of education. Obviously, poor children in remote areas can not go to school due to unaffordable tuition fees. In deed, when they confront the shortage of income to cove their basic needs like food, shelters, resulting in difficulty to be educated full-time. Therefore, their families need an extra income to prove the level of training of younger generation. In addition, i also believe that there are some teenagers having their own ability to seek their ambitions when they are under18 years old. My younger brother, for example, was off school at 16 years old because he was not interested in studying. However, now he is successful in selling wood products.

In conclusion, i do not believe that young children should be required to attend with fully educated at least 18 years old although it is one of the key factor for achievement

Answer 1

Đây là góp ý của mình :D

 aging 18 which is => the age of 18 is

young children might be more likely to be vulnerable due to not full-educated => young children are more likely to be vulnerable because of not being full-educated

their mental and self- controllability make it difficult for them to control their actions as well as can not decide their future. => they may find it difficult to control their actions as well as decide their future.

they are insufficient ability to join the workforce. => they are possibly incapable of joining the workforce.

In deed, when they confront the shortage of income to cove their basic needs like food, shelters, resulting in difficulty to be educated full-time => câu này mình thấy ko rõ lắm , về ngữ pháp thì sửa in deed => indeed, bỏ when.

factor => factors

fully educated => full-time education

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