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Topic: Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
 
A number of people enjoy living in the countryside or a town, while others prefer to settle down in well-developed cities. Although I concur that living in cities brings many significant benefit, I prefer to live in the countryside. I infer from the environmental aspect, fee, food as well as people that living in small towns is better.
First of all, urban cities usually face up to the fact that pollution is worse than ever before thanks to the rapid development of industry and transportation means. On the other hand, rural places do not have many cars or factories that discharge toxic waste. Therefore, those places mitigate chances of having pollution than in the cities.
Secondly, food quality is also considerable when comparing between big cities and small towns. Urban citizens have to pay for their food while they do not know exactly whether the food are qualified or not. However, when living in small towns, you will be able to grow your own food so that you will not be desperately worried about the food quality.
Thirdly, neighborhood is also very important when living anywhere. In the cities, people do not usually know each others as well as in the rural places. For instance, after getting home from work, urban citizens will have to quickly have dinner and rush to bed in order to wake up early the next day. On the other hand, when living in the countryside, people in their own village know each other very well. After working in the field, they can friendly ask about your day and there is a good chance that they will invite you for dinner.
In conclusion, while I accept that cities are suitable for some people, I still prefer to live in the countryside.
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A number of people enjoy living in the countryside or a town, while others prefer to settle down in well-developed cities. Although I concur that living in cities brings many significant benefits, I prefer to live in the countryside. I infer from the environmental aspect, fee, food as well as people that living in small towns is better.

1. There is a fundamental missunderstand what you know between the countryside and a small town.

2. From my personal view, you should use alternative word instead of the word "infer".

First of all, urban cities usually face up to the fact that pollution is worse than ever before thanks to the rapid development of industry and transportation meansOn the other hand, rural places do not have many cars or factories that discharge toxic waste. Therefore, those places mitigate chances of having pollution than in the cities.

It is better when you write the topic sentence clearly because your topic sentence seems wordy under my eyes.

means of transportation is by far the most popular collocation.

have pollution is not a good collocation.

Secondly, food quality is also considerable factor when comparing drawing a comparsion between big cities and small towns. Urban citizens have to pay for their food while they are unaware do not know exactly whether the food are qualified or not. However, when living in small towns, you will be able to grow your own food so that you will not be desperately worried about the food quality.

Secondly, food quality is a key factor when drawing a comparison between large cities and small towns. While urban citizens spend a lot of money on food which they seem totally unaware of quality,  town dwellers are likely to attain food self-sufficiency in order to ensure food security and sanitation. 

Thirdly (Finally), neighborhood is also very important when living anywhere. In the cities, people do not usually know each others as well as in the rural places. For instance, after getting arriving home from work, urban citizens will have to quickly have dinner and rush to bed in order to wake up early the next day. On the other hand, when living in the countryside, people in their own village know each other very well. After working in the field, they can friendly ask about your day and there is a good chance that they will invite you for dinner.

The topic sentence is unclear.

 

 

 

 

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