The given line graph illustrates how many passengers spent went on railway trips made in the United Kingdom over a period of 55 years, starting from 1950. Units are measured in millions.
Overall, it is abvious that the number of passengers spent going on railway journeys in all mentioned rail saw an upward trend over the period shown. Moreover Additionally, the figure for National rail network is registered the highest figure.
According to the graph, the number of passengers of National rail work decreased gradually from 1000m to around 750m from 1950 to 1980 while There was a slight fluctuation between under 750 million and 500 million in the quantity of passengers used to take on taking London Underground from 1950 to 1980. Meanwhile, there were few people taking the Light Rail and Metro Systems in the beginning and the number remained stable until 1980 when the figure reached 0. a slight drop was seen in the number of passenger spent traveling on Light Rail and Metro Systems from about 1963 to 1980.
In addition, the number of passengers expended of the Naional rail work from 1980 to 2004/5 was experienced a moderate growth from about 750m to 1100m. In terms of passenger, the London Underground, its figure witnessed a significant rocket rise from about 550m to almost 1000m from 1980 to 2004/05. It can be seen that the number of passenger who had used Light rail anđ Metro systems was gradually increased to about 200 million by the end of the period.
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