IELTS task 1 1/2/2018

Question

The table gives information about the percentage of citizens in a town, including males and females in five distinct age groups who rode bikes in the year 2011.

Overall, as can be seen from the table, the proportion of female cyclists was greater than male cyclists regardless of any age groups. Additionally, the youngest group was the most cycle users, while the lowest percentage ones belonged to those aged 40 to 59.

Delving into the table, over half percentage of residents riding bicycles was recorded in both girls and boys of group 0-9. The ratio remained relatively for former at 42.2 % in group 10-17, while the latter dropped  twice as much as the younger group with 24.6%.

The proportion of the  18-59 years old cycling population was  lower than in other groups. Just 17.1% of women rode bicycles in group 18 to 39, compared to 9.7% of men.  At the age of 49 to 50, the figures fell further, roughly 12% for females and 8% for males. The interesting point is that the percentage of  female and male cyclists rose to 18.5% and 13.2%, respectively.

Answer 1

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The table gives information about the percentage of (citizens in a town, including males and females in five distinct age groups who rode bikes in the year 2011.)  -> male and female bicycle users of five different age groups in a town in 2011.

Overall, as can be seen from the table, the proportion of female cyclists was greater than male cyclists regardless of any age groups. Additionally, people of the youngest group were the (most)->most frequent cycle users, while the lowest percentage ones belonged to those aged 40 to 59.

Delving into the table, over half percentage of residents riding bicycles was recorded in both girls and boys of the 0-9 age group. The ratio remained relatively for former at 42.2 % in the 10-17 age group, while the latter dropped twice as (much) ->many as the younger group with 24.6%.

The proportion of the 18-59 years old (cycling population)->cyclists was lower than in other groups. (Just)->mình nghĩ nên dùng only thay vì just bởi từ just nghe hơi giống văn nói, không được formal cho lắm 17.1% of women rode bicycles in group 18 to 39, compared to 9.7% of men.  At the age of 49 to 50, the figures fell further, roughly 12% for females and 8% for males. (The)->The most/An interesting point (is)->was that the percentage of female and male cyclists rose to 18.5% and 13.2%, respectively.

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