IELTS Writing Task 1 ngày 8/2/2020

Question

The table illustrates the values of kiwi fruit which was exported by New Zealand to 5 different countries over the world from 2010 to 2012. Overall, the values of exports to Japan, China, and Russia followed an upward trend, the figure for Mexico and Saudi Arabia witnessed a noticeable fluctuation.

As you can see from the table, in 2010, Japan was the largest export market, with 271.1 million NZ$, followed by China, at 74.9 million NZ$. In addition, the exports earning from Mexico ranked third with 6 million NZ$. By contrast, the export revenues that NZ earned from Russia and Saudi Arabia were significantly lower at 968 thousand NZ$ and 290 thousand NZ$, respectively. 

In the next 2 years, the values of exports to Japan increased sharply to 325,3 million NZ$. Similarly, the figure for China and Russia grew slightly to 94 million NZ$. Unlike Japan and China, the exports earning from Mexico dropped nearly threefold to 2.4 million NZ$ in 2011 before climbing up to 3.3 million NZ$ in 2012. On the contrary, the export revenues that NZ earned from Saudi Arabia experienced a plummet at 82 thousand NZ$ in 2012 after reaching to 407 thousand NZ$ in 2012.

 

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The table illustrates the values of kiwi fruit which was exported by New Zealand to 5 different countries over the world from 2010 to 2012. Overall, the values of exports to Japan, China, and Russia followed an upward trend, the figure for Mexico and Saudi Arabia witnessed a noticeable fluctuation.

As you can see from the table, in 2010, Japan was the largest export market, with 271.1 million NZ$, followed by China, at 74.9 million NZ$. Besides, the exports earning from Mexico ranked third with 6 million NZ$. By contrast, the export revenues that NZ earned from Russia and Saudi Arabia were significantly lower at 968 thousand NZ$ and 290 thousand NZ$, respectively. 

In the next 2 years, the values of exports to Japan increased sharply to 325,3 million NZ$. Similarly, the figure for China and Russia grew slightly to 94 million NZ$. Unlike Japan and China, the exports earning from Mexico dropped nearly threefold to 2.4 million NZ$ in 2011 before climbing up to 3.3 million NZ$ in 2012. On the contrary, the export revenues that NZ earned from Saudi Arabia experienced a plummet at 82 thousand NZ$ in 2012 after reaching to 407 thousand NZ$ in 2012.

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