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The table compared the proportion of consumer expenditure for three categories of popular product in five nations in 2002.-> The table gives information about the consumers’ expenditures spent on three different popular products in five nations in 2002.
It is clear that food, drinks and tobacco accounted for the highest (percentage)->percentages. On the other hand, the lowest proportion (is went)->went on leisure and education.
Turkey (is)->was the nation (which)->that reached the highest point on food, drinks, tobacco with 32,14%. (Another country, the percentage, which Italy had, was up to half Turkey: 16,36%)-> An another country having its portion was half as many as Turkey’s one was Italy (16,36%).
(For clothing and footwear, Italy reached a peak with 9%)-> With 9%, Italy dominated in clothing and footwear’s portion. (Besides)->Particularly, (the proportion of four other countries did not have long distance, from 5,4% to 6,51%)-> (the four other countries’ figures made up approximately similar positions in the table) (chỗ này mình không hiểu ý bạn viết lắm, tham khảo thôi nha) . In (fact)->addition, the percentage of Sweden was (just)->slightly over 5%. Spain had the lowest percentage of leisure and education(, just near 2%)->at approximately 2% (while Turkey had a remarkable percentage , more than twice as much as Turkey with 4,35%)->(cả câu này mình không hiểu ý bạn lắm, chỉ thấy được lỗi ngữ pháp về mệnh đề quan hệ thôi, bạn xem lại nha). (Italy and Sweden had not as much as different number, just more than 3%. Ireland had a lower proportion with 2,21%)->With only more than 3% of difference, Italy and Sweden almost took the same positions in the table. Meanwhile, Ireland had a lower figure at 2,21% of clients’ expenditures.
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