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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Despite the fact the the matter of the help of developed countries has not grabbed a headline as frequently as other issues in the fast-paced life. It does not mean that it is less vital. One can subscribe to a notion that developed countries should give more types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. As far as i am concerned, I side with this statement since these types of helps could improve the poor countries's economy.

There is no doubt that some more types of help of developed countries has been regareded as the profound contribution of improving the poor countries life quality. For example, if a countries are in the bad condition, the developed countries can give them more types of help such as hiring professors who are especially research in the field that negatively affecting the poor countries to help these countries overcome their problem. To be more specific, if a country have a problem in their education, they could take the help from developed countries by sending their best teachers to go to developed countries to study the teaching method in these countries. This is essential way since they can study more valuable things from the developed countries's education. As a result, improving life quality in poor countries has been induced by the help of developed countries.

It is a little room for doubt that finding out more drawbacks of the poor countries has been attributed to the help of developed countries. In simple terms, the professors who are in poor countries going to the developed countries to determine more about the lack of improvement in their countries can see many cons. Therefore, they can help their country by pursue the improvement aspects. As a result, the help of developed countries helps the poorer countries discover their lack of improvement.

In conclusion, although sending money is a good way to help poor countries, but it is not likely to last for very long. It seems to me that the developed countries should give more types of help to support poorer countries.

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Despite the fact the --> that the matter of the help of developed countries --> supporting other countries has not grabbed a headline as frequently as other issues in the fast-paced life. However, it does not mean that it is less vital. One can subscribe to a notion that developed countries should give more types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. -->  không nên viết lại câu y hệt đề bài. Có thể viết thành In many cases, financial bailouts do not always have good effects on poverty, so developed countries should consider others ways. As far as i am concerned, I side with this statement since these types of helps could improve the poor countries's economy.

There is no doubt that some more types of help of developed countries has  --> have been regareded as the profound contribution of improving the poor countries life quality. For example, if a countries are --> country is in the bad condition, the developed countries can give them more types of help such as -->  like hiring professors who are especially research in the field that negatively affecting the poor countries to help these countries overcome their problem. To be more specific, if a country have -->  has a problem in their education, they could take the help from developed countries by sending their best teachers to go to developed countries to study the teaching method in these countries. This is essential way since they can study more valuable things from the developed countries's education -->  education of developed countries. As a result, improving life quality in poor countries has been induced by the help of developed countries.

It is a little room for doubt that finding out more drawbacks of the poor countries has been attributed to the help of developed countries. In simple terms, the professors who are in poor countries going to the developed countries to determine more about the lack of improvement in their countries can see many cons. Therefore, they can help their country by pursue the improvement aspects. As a result, the help of developed countries helps the poorer countries discover their lack of improvement.

In conclusion, although sending money is a good way to help poor countries, but it is not likely to last for very long. It seems to me that the developed countries should give more types of help to support poorer countries.

 

You repeat many times “help” words -->  you can replace it by others words such as support, bailouts, aid, assist, sponsor in each suitable sentence.

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