WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many people in the undeveloped world die from diseases that are curable because they can’t afford the medication to treat themselves. Do you believe that drug companies in the developed world should be obliged to make their products available at reduced prices in these undeveloped countries so that people do not die unnecessarily. You should write at least 250 words.
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Thousands of people in the undeveloped country cannot survive from even many a curable disease because of the medication expense. A given solution which means that drug companies in the richer countries should provide cheap health service for the poorer ones to reduce the number of deaths is food for thoughts for every individual.

The advantage is not only for the aim of the solution but also for the reputation of the health system in the developed world. For example WTO - a famous medical organization that supports low-priced drugs for all of the African people will gain fame and respect from other people not only for itself but for the whole country, also a very good reflection for the next generations to follow. Of course, the more organizations like this raise, the easier the jobless problem can be solved. It means goodness from inside out if solving the problem like that.

However there are some disadvantages for it. First of all, medicinal plants and resources are limited and it takes a lot of money to restore or recycle. Secondly it will be a waste of time if researchers do not spend times discovering new methods and more high-quality medicines, as cancer is a very dangerous disease that is needed to treat right as soon as possible

Considering both benefits and drawbacks of the solution, I think it is better if the medicine companies in developed countries voluntarily help the poorer ones in order to show friendliness and care to as well as improve their own situations such as health system, unemployment, crimes, education, ... It is good for both sides.

To sum up, so as to decrease the unnecessary deaths, rich health organizations had better make their products at cheap prices in the undeveloped countries. People should lead a healthy lifestyle so that they do not have to waste too much money on health problems.

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Thousands of people in (the) undeveloped countries cannot survive from (even) many curable diseases because of the medication expenses. A given solution which means that drug companies in the more developed countries should provide cheap health services for the developing ones to reduce the number of deaths is food for thoughts for every individual. =>  what do you mean?

This solution is not only for the aim of the solution but also for the reputation of the health system all over the world. For example WHO - World Health Organization that supports low-priced drugs for all (of) the African people will gain fame and respectation from other people (not only for itself but for the whole country also a very good reflection for the next generations to follow) but also không được tách ra bạn nhé. cái thứ 2 là tổ chức WHO này nghĩa vụ của nó phải thế chứ không phải nó làm để trở thành tấm gương cho thế hệ sau này. Of course, the more organizations like this are established, the easier the unemployment problem can be solved. It means good (from inside out=> what do you mean if solving the problem like that. => câu điều kiện???

However there are some disadvantages of it. First of all, medician plants and resources are limited and it takes a lot of money to restore (or recyclethuốc không thể tái chế được  Secondly, it will be a waste of time if researchers do not spend times in discovering new methods and more high-quality medicines, as cancer is a very dangerous disease that need to be treated (right) as soon as possible

Considering both benefits and drawbacks of the solution, I think it is better if the medicine companies in developed countries voluntarily help the poorer ones in order to show friendliness and care (to) as well as develope their own situations such as health system, education, and solve some problems like crimes, unemployment states, and so on (không nên dùng ... trong bài viết academic) It is good for both sides.

To sum up, so as to decrease the unnecessary deaths, (rich) health organizations had better make their products with low prices for the developing countries. Authorities should lead a healthy lifestyle so that they do not have to waste too much money on health problems.

 

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