Bài IELTS writing task 1 [closed]

Question

The line graph demonstrates about the number of car owned by people in the United Kingdom between 1975 and 2005, a period of 30 years.
Overall, people who owned 2 to 3 cars or more tends to increased slightly over the period, whilst the percentage of people owning a car or none showed an opposite pattern. It is clear from the chart that although the proportion of 1 car was decrease but it still predominated over the others at the end of the period.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that in 1975, the number of people who had 1 car showed some fluctuation over the 30-year period, it reached the bottom in 1985 with approximately 35%, decreased more than 5% from 1975. However, in the period between 1985 and 2005, it showed an upward trend to reach 40% at the end of the period. At the same time, the percentage of people who did not have any car plummeted remarkably from 30% in 1975 to 20% in 2005.
In sharp contrast to this, people who have 2 cars to 3 cars or more enjoyed upswings, especially the number of people owning 2 cars had increased sharply 10% from 5% in 975 to approximately 15% in 2005. Meanwhile, the number of people who owned 3 cars or more also increased more than 5%, to reached 10% in 2005.

Answer 1

Enable GingerThe line graph demonstrates about the number of cars owned by people in the United Kingdom between 1975 and 2005, a period of 30 years.
Overall, people who owned 2 to 3 cars or more tends to increased slightly over the period, whilst the percentage of people owning a car or none showed an opposite pattern. It is clear from the chart that although the proportion of 1 car was decreased, but (You have used "although", so do not use "but") it still predominated over the others at the end of the period.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that in 1975, the number of people who had 1 car showed some fluctuation over the 30 year period, it reached the bottom in 1985 with approximately 35%, decreased more than 5% from 1975. However, in the period between 1985 and 2005, it showed an upward trend to reach 40% at the end of the period. At the same time, the percentage of people who did not have any car plummeted remarkably from 30% in 1975 to 20% in 2005.
In sharp contrast to this, people who have 2 cars to 3 cars or more enjoyed upswings, especially the number of people owning 2 cars had increased sharply 10% from 5% in 975 to approximately 15% in 2005. Meanwhile, the number of people who owned 3 cars or more also increased by more than 5%, to reached 10% in 2005.

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