It is difficult for high-school students to choose between continuing their education or working straight after graduating from high school/ graduation. Although there are some benefits of getting a job after school, I believe that going to the university or college is better.
*Đề xuất: Higher education such as university or college is believed to be the most efficient way to future success. Meanwhile, some people argue that practical jobs are more essentials for students than academic knowledge. For me, it is obvious that skills taught in universities are the most important factors contributing to a person's successful career. (Note: khi mở bài bạn nên paraphrase lại đề bài và đưa ra quan điểm cá nhân đối với dạng discuss both views. Phần mở bài bạn nên ở trên chưa có 2 quan điểm ở đề, do đó khiến bạn dễ bị mất điểm task fulfillment)
On the one hand, it is undeniable that finding a job after high school brings students many advantages. Firstly, the youngsters can earn their own money from their jobs. This -> , which will help them live independently without any help from their parents. Secondly, working straight after graduating also helps young people have real experiences to accumulate valuable life lessons. In fact, effective life skills are not in books but only from our failures in lifetime.
On the other hand, I certainly believe that going to the university or college after graduating from high school is a better choice. Firstly, students can have opportunity to get higher education. In fact, they can gain more exclusive knowledge on their field of study ->majors. Secondly, studying at university or college brings the youngsters high -> precious academic qualifications, which will help them to get high-paying -> well-paid jobs. The reason is that many big businesses nowadays tend to recruit the employees who have high degree such as Bachelor degree or Master’s degree.
In conclusion, even though both options have their own benefits, it seems that -> I certainly believe that/ It is obvious that students who continue their study after graduating are likely to be more successful in pursuing their dream jobs -> careers.
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