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Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children. Others think parents needn’t do that as children can read books or watch TV, movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Many people argue that it is the responsibility of parents to read or tell stories to their offsprings, while others think that such activities are unnecessary since children can read books or watch television by themselves. This essay will discuss both views, but I personally believe that it is preferable for parents to tell stories to their children.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why it is mandatory for parents to tell stories or read books for their children. First of all, reading stories for children in their formative years can develop family bond and help shape the child’s personality. Parents who devote time and thought to raising and educating their children can improve family tie and give their kids a good preparation to enter adult life. They are also able to bridge the generation gap by telling stories and reading books to their offsprings and discussing them. Secondly, it is undeniable that children cannot fully understand stories by reading themselves. Therefore, if parents make them understand stories by reading and translating it, they can understand it much better. For example, if a 7-year-old kid chooses to read “The Godfather” by themselves, which is an unsuitable book for such age, there will be a possibility of misundersatnding the concept, moral and the profound meaning of the stories.

On the other hand, many say that children should be encouraged to read books by themselves for many reasons. One reason is that the parents nowadays have heavy workload to deal with, therefore they have little time left for themselves not to mention telling stories to their kids. For example, with single parent household becoming the norm in today’s world, single mother or father have to balance the demands of home and work. In this case, supporting their family is more vital than wasting time reading some books or accompanying their offsprings. Another reason is that children should learn to be independent at the earliest stage of life. Children can independently choose to read every kind and genres of book as they wish and thus broaden their knowledge on their own.

In conclusion, although today’s children have the ability to read books or watch movies on their own without having their parents to hold them on each and every step, I believe that it is more preferable for parents to spend time accompanying their children by telling stories.

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Many people argue that it is the responsibility of parents to read or tell stories to their offsprings, while others think that such activities are unnecessary since children can read books or watch television by themselves. This essay will discuss both views, but I personally believe that it is preferable for parents to tell stories to their children.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why it is mandatory for parents to tell stories or read books for their children. First of all, reading stories for children in their formative years can develop family bond and help shape the child’s personality. Parents who devote time and thought to raising and educating their children can improve family tie and give their kids a good preparation to enter adult life. They are also able to bridge the generation gap by telling stories and reading books to their offsprings and discussing the books with them. Secondly, it is undeniable that children cannot fully understand stories by reading themselves. Therefore, if parents make them understand stories by explain the story while reading and translating it, they can understand it much better. For example, if a 7-year-old kid chooses to read “The Godfather” by themselves, which is an unsuitable book for such age, there will be a possibility of misundersatnding the concept, moral and the profound meaning of the stories. (Ví dụ này có thể không phù hợp lắm với câu mà bạn đang cần chứng minh)

On the other hand, many say that children should be encouraged to read books by themselves for many reasons. One reason is that the parents nowadays these days have heavy workload to deal with, therefore they have little time left for themselves not to mention (let alone) telling stories to their kids. For example, with single parent, household becoming becomes the norm in today’s world, single mother or father have to balance the demands of home and work. In this case, supporting their family is more vital than wasting time reading some books or accompanying their offsprings. Another reason is that children should learn to be independent at from the earliest stage of life. Children can independently choose to read every kind and genres of book as they wish and thus broadening their knowledge on their own.

In conclusion, although today’s children have the ability to read books or watch movies on their own without having their parents to hold them on each and every step, I believe that it is more preferable for parents to spend time accompanying their children by telling stories.

Some of my comments:

- You have implemented some relatively clear and reasonable ideas.

- However, you are still making some mistakes in grammar and using words that I have taken notes so that you can pay attention.

Overall, you have done well, hope my comments can help you!

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