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The provided table compares the figures of a survey on the consumption of mobile phone during the six-year period, from 2006 to 2012.

Overall, the number of Ericson and Motorola mobile phones sold slipped dramatically, while Samsung and Apple saw an opposite trend in their sales; and Nokia purchase did not show any significant differences over the period.

In 2006, the most prevalent phone brand was Nokia, being approximately three times more than that of Samsung, which was 117 million units. Despite the vacillations in Nokia’s sales that ended up at 335, Samsung seemed to gain the substantial popularity, becoming the top brand of mobile phone at the point of 396.5 at the end of the period.

Turning to three remaining categories, Apple joined the mobile phones market in 2007 with the sales of 2.3. After five years, however, the brand witnessed a ceiling trend to 135.8 in 2012. In comparison, Ericson and Motorola simultaneously showed a dramatic fall, from 74 and 210 respectively to 28 over a period of six years.

Answer 1

The provided table compares the figures of a survey on the consumption of mobile phone during the six-year period, from 2006 to 2012.

Overall, the number of Ericson and Motorola mobile phones sold slipped dramatically, while Samsung and Apple saw an opposite trend in their sales; and Nokia purchase did not show any significant differences over the period. 

In 2006, the most prevalent phone brand was Nokia, being approximately three times more than that of Samsung, which was 117 million units. Despite the vacillations in Nokia’s sales that ended up at 335 (?) Samsung seemed to gain the substantial popularity, becoming the top brand of mobile phone at the point of 396.5 at the end of the period.

Turning to three remaining categories, (suggest : As regards three remaining categories) Apple joined the mobile phones market in 2007 with the sales of 2.3. After five years, however, (why using however here - nếu nó có một sự giảm sụt đằng trước thì mới nên dùng) the brand witnessed a ceiling trend to 135.8 in 2012. In comparison, Ericson and Motorola simultaneously showed a dramatic fall, from 74 and 210 respectively to 28 over a period of six years.

 

General feedback : Flexible vocabularies, however should be careful with word choice. You are around band 6.5-7.0

 

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