I)elts task 2 ( 10/1) Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invastion into their private life?

Question

Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invastion into their private life?

In today’s modern, the media has rapidly evolved over the past years, the influence of the media on the way media companies do business. Although, celebrities worry about their private will be violated by the media, celebrities’ private is at stake need to care by media.

First, the media of many companies forming a diversity of opinions. Although, having some information is not clear, one will not impinge on celebrities. Many abundant information and quite objective from different companies will be protected true information of themselves. Second, celebrities’ private will be protected by law from media companies. Therefore, media companies will not be motivated to engage in bad behaviors against celebrities or to make suffering celebrities such as creating fake news.

In addition, celebrities and public attention are directly correlation. Celebrities should understand they will be paid extra attention by their fan or public society. Those will protect celebrities to exit fake news. In fact, there are some additions by public society, celebrities should have even responsibility into their private such as maintain private’s value, which effect on their belief. Therefore, they should not be angry if the media is doing its job or celebrities are badly making their value.

In conclusion, celebrities are treated fairly by the media. Understanding that celebrities’ responsibility is higher, one can find a common ground.

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Answer 1

1. You wrote: ...ivacy, or is the price of their fame an invastion into their private life? In today’s mo...

Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found

Error type: Possible Typo

Suggestion: invasion

 

2. You wrote: ...on the way media companies do business. Although, celebrities worry about their private w...

Feedback: Do not put a comma after the "although".

Error type: Punctuation error

Suggestion: Although

 

3. You wrote: ...panies forming a diversity of opinions. Although, having some information is not clear, o...

Feedback: Do not put a comma after the "although".

Error type: Punctuation error

Suggestion: Although

 

4. You wrote: ...s. Although, having some information is not clear, one will not impinge on celebrities. M...

Feedback: Instead of "not clear', try "vague", "ambiguous".

Error type: Negative phrasing error

Suggestion: vague, ambiguous

 

5. You wrote: ...r, one will not impinge on celebrities. Many abundant information and quite objective from different comp...

Feedback: There is an agreement error here. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: "much abundant information", "a good deal of abundant information".

Error type: Adverb Word order

Suggestion: Much abundant information, A good deal of abundant information

 

6. You wrote: ..., they should not be angry if the media is doing its job or celebrities are badly ...

Feedback: If your subject "the media" is plural, you need a third person plural verb "are". (va99)

Error type: Verb agreement error

Suggestion: are