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I think watching TV is bad because

Firstly, We can not spend much time is studying and it makes you feel tired and lazy.

Secondly, We always watch TV in free time have negative effects on our health. There is a rise a number of people who is my opic.

Thirtly, Some people can imitale bad behaviors in bad programs
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I assume spending an enormous amount of time on TV is detrimental to most people for several underlying reasons

first, it is clear that watching your favorites shows or series on TV hours and hours is such a time-consuming activity, instead of partaking in outdoor activities most people tend to lead a sedentary lifestyle by sticking to their tv screens, hence leading to the neglection of studying and bad performance at school.

second, it can also be seen that a majority of people might suffer from arthitis related diseases as backache due to their inappropriate postures; their back may be prone to get hurt, giving rise to health deterioration in the long run.

third, from the behaviour perspectives, there is a common acknowledge that children are likely to imitate violation scenes which sometimes are not well censored by the goverments, this would certainly have a negative impact on their consciousness and increase the likelihood of commiting more crimes in the foreseeable future.
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Watching too much television is not good for your health. But it also has the advantages 

 

* the advantages of watching television

 

  1. In this busy, expensive life, television is an easy and cheap source of entertainment.
  2. By watching international news, we are kept informed and up-to-date with breaking news around the world.
  3. Some shows and channels (like PBS and Discovery) offer educational programs that can increase our knowledge and make us more aware of the world around us.
  4. Do-it-yourself shows give us easy access to all kinds of information: Cooking channels offer new recipes and methods, home improvement shows introduce us to many money-saving DIY tips, and financial advisers give advice for managing finances and investing money, for example. Television can also be a good way to help people learn a different language.
  5. Some shows can motivate people who are interested in that field and help them to pursue their dreams.
  6. Television can help you feel less lonely. Psychologists coined the term "social surrogacy" to explain how television can fill the shoes of absent friends or family. In one study published in the Journal of Experimental Social Psychology, researchers found that people who watch a favorite TV show report feeling less lonely during the show.
  7. TV can expand your mind. Some shows let you travel vicariously and teach you about different people, cultures, ideas, and places you might never encounter in real life. Watching a variety of shows might give us a broader understanding of the world we live in and expose us to things we might otherwise never come across in our own lives.
  8. TV can make you feel like part of a group and let you participate in a shared subculture. In social situations where you may find yourself surrounded by strangers with whom you have nothing in common, a popular show or televised sporting event might give you something to talk about.
  9. Gathering around the television gives families, friends, and strangers something to bond over. Even if you're not interested in the Olympics, watching the games with your family might bring you closer together; reminiscing about shows you've watched together gives you shared history and memories.
  10. There may be certain health benefits to watching television. If a certain show makes you laugh, for example, then an argument can be made for its mood-elevating merits. While exercising, television can distract you from what you're doing and therefore enable you to last longer on the treadmill (there's a good reason why so many gyms have televisions, after all!). One study from the University of Rochester found that people felt more energetic after watching nature scenes.
  11. Television might be a free, easy source of sexual education. In a study from UC Santa Barbara, young girls who watched an episode of a nighttime soap opera that showed a character dealing with an unintended pregnancy reported being more likely to practice safe sex.
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