The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Question

The bar charts reveals statistics about the prior reasons for students in terms of studying in different age groups and the support from recruiters.

It is clear that people who study for career purpose is far higher among the younger age groups, while the purpose of studying for interest shows the oldest people. Recruiters are more commonly given to younger students.

As can be seen from the graph, around 80 percent of students under 26 years old whose reason is career reach a highest point, whereas the purpose for interest hit the lowest point, at 10 percent. The gap between two proportions narrows as students get older and the figure reaches the same in their forties, with the figure standing at 40 percent. Students aged over 49 overwhelmingly study for interest (70%) rather than professional purpose (less than 20%).

Turning to the next chart, students aged under 26 are constantly supported by the employers, just over 60%. In contrast, people who in group age of 30-39 is the most self-sufficient, with the figure standing over 30% being given time off and less supporting. Next, the figure experiences a slight increase for students in their forties and for those aged over 50 or more.

 

Answer 1

1. You wrote: The bar charts reveals statistics about the prior reasons for ...

Feedback: You should probably use "reveal".

Error type: Verb agreement error

Suggestion: reveal

 

2. You wrote: ... years old whose reason is career reach a highest point, whereas the purpose for ...

Feedback: Use "the" with the superlative.

Error type: Adverb Word order

Suggestion: the