Bài tập IELTS Task 1 - Line chart

Question

 The line chart illustrates the percentage of new teachers who teach English and French after they graduated in Ontario from 2001 to 2007.

According to the data, approximately 70% recruitments got the jobs not only in English teacher group but also in French teacher group as well, even though the figure of the former was minimally lower than the latter in 2001. Ther following year observed a marked decrease in both categories, the first was at 55% then the second was 51%.

During the last five years of the period, there was a considerable difference between the rate of employed English teachers and French teachers. In fact, the number of the students got the jobs as French teachers increased respectively as opposed to the enormous fall in the number of the students employed as an English teachers in 2003. Despite the slight rise in the percentage of recruitments of both categories from 2003 to 2005, the employments of new graduates as French teachers slightly slipped back in 2006 before the rate of it surged to the peak at nearly 73̀̀% in 2007, in comparison with the rapid decline of the rate of the new employed English teachers at the lowest point, 28%,  in the end of the period.

Overall, at the beginning both categories started nearly at the same rate in 2001 before the graduated students changed their aim to become a French teacher more than an English teacher during the left observing period.

Answer 1

You wrote: ...ccording to the data, approximately 70% recruitments got the jobs not only in English teache...

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Error type: Possible Typo

Suggestion: recruitment, recruitment s

 

2. You wrote: ...inimally lower than the latter in 2001. Ther following year observed a marked decrea...

Feedback: You probably meant "years". Check it.

Error type: Contextual Spelling Errors

Suggestion: Years

 

3. You wrote: ... of the students employed as an English teachers in 2003. Despite the slight rise in the...

Feedback: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "an English teacher" or simply the plural without the article "English teachers"?

Error type: Article error

Suggestion: an English teacher, English teachers

 

4. You wrote: ...in 2003. Despite the slight rise in the percentage of recruitments of both categories from...

Feedback: Instead of "of," use "number" with a plural. Try this: "a number of recruitments".

Error type: Word choice error

Suggestion: a number of recruitments

 

5. You wrote: ...te the slight rise in the percentage of recruitments of both categories from 2003 to 2005, t...

Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found

Error type: Possible Typo

Suggestion: recruitment, recruitment s