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Question

The line graph indicates the proportion of the out-of-work in the US and Japan over a six-year period.

It is noticable that both two figures witnessed great fluctuations all the period before standing at the same point in the last year given.

With almost 7% reported in March 1993, the rate of unoccupied peoplein the US fell steadily before hitting a low of roughly 4,8% in March 1998, followed by a slight rise to 5% in the last surveyed year. Despite being far too lower than the US, with only 2,4% of the unemplyed at first, Japan saw its figure constantly climb over a period of 5 years, peaking at 5,2% in March 1998 then dropped back to 5%, equal to the other firgure.

In conclusion, as a positive side, the unemployment rate in the US experienced a fall all the way, the workless in Japan, however, accounted for increasing proportion throughout surveyed years.

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Answer 1

The line graph indicates the proportion of the out-of-work in the US and Japan over a six-year period.

It is noticable that both two figures witnessed great fluctuations all the period before standing at the same point in the last given year.

=>suggest: it is noticeable that the figures for the US underemployed people went down whereas that of Japan increased over the period of 6 years.

With almost 7% reported in March 1993, the rate of unoccupied people in the US fell steadily before hitting a low of roughly 4,8% in March 1998, followed by a slight rise to 5% in the last surveyed year. Despite being far too lower than the US, with only 2,4% of the unemployed at first, Japan saw its figure constantly climbed over a period of 5 years suggest from... to..., peaked at 5,2% in March 1998 then dropped back to 5%, equal to the other firgure.

In conclusion, as a positive side, the unemployment rate in the US experienced a fall all the way, the workless in Japan, however, accounted for increasing proportion throughout surveyed years.

comment

in common, there are usually 2 paragraphs in the body of task 1 thus you should choose two main fields and put it in 2 paraghaphs. and because you have an overall so the conclusion isn't necessary. and you should give more comparison between the datas. I'll give you a 5-5.5 for this

if my comment is helpful please like and vote for it as the best common.

Answer 2

The line graph indicates the proportion of the out-of-work ( đây là tính từ nên không thể sử dụng đc ở đây) in the US and Japan over a six-year period.

It is noticable that both two figures witnessed great fluctuations all the period before standing at the same point in the last year given. (given year)

With almost 7% reported in March 1993, the rate of unoccupied people in the US fell steadily before hitting a low of roughly 4,8% in March 1998, followed by a slight rise to 5% in the last surveyed year. Despite being far too lower than the US, with only 2,4% of the unemployed at first, Japan saw its figure constantly climb over a period of 5 years, peaking (ed) at 5,2% in March 1998 then dropped back to 5%, equal to the other firgure.

In conclusion, as a positive side, the unemployment rate in the US experienced a fall all the way, the workless (Đây tiếp tục là 1 tính từ nên k thể sử dụng như thế này đc) in Japan, however, accounted for increasing proportion throughout surveyed years.