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It's undeniable that tourism is an importan leading industruy in both developed and developing country; therefore, investment in tourism is obiviously worthy. In the first place, tourism brings effectively economic benefits as its yields billions of dollars per year Not only does it appeal to local residents, but it also attracts foreign visitors as well, which is a big source of foreign currency. On the other hand, this industry is that it raises our living standard. For instance, the jobless have more employment opportunity and the wealthy can have good trips which help them relax and extend their knowledge. It provides many chances for jobs such as in hotels, bars, pubs, restaurants or staffing. In addition, tourism might bring many benefits to another industry like transportation, especially airplanes. Last but not least, tourism is a bridge that connect us with the outer world. Public relations, with other countries all over the word in order that people in there might access to our countries more and more with beautiful places, customs and traditions.If we demand honor, respect and admiration for other countries, it is inevitable to enhace our image through this industry. Some people may react that tourism may be caused to environments by conscious of tourists. In fact, this react is true but I think, both increasingly tourism and governments must enforce tourists by these strict rules to deal with this problems effectively. To sum up, such is the importance of tourism that investment in this field is great of necessity.

 

 

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1. You wrote: It's undeniable that tourism is an importan leading industruy in both developed and...

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2. You wrote: ...ble that tourism is an importan leading industruy in both developed and developing countr...

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3. You wrote: ...ry; therefore, investment in tourism is obiviously worthy. In the first place, tourism bri...

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4. You wrote: ...brings effectively economic benefits as its yields billions of dollars per year Not only d...

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5. You wrote: ...but not least, tourism is a bridge that connect us with the outer world. Public relatio...

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6. You wrote: ... Public relations, with other countries all over the word in order that people in there might acc...

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7. You wrote: ...er countries all over the word in order that people in there might access to our cou...

 

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8. You wrote: ...es more and more with beautiful places, customs and traditions.If we demand honor, respect ...

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9. You wrote: ...or other countries, it is inevitable to enhace our image through this industry. Some p...

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10. You wrote: ...ists by these strict rules to deal with this problems effectively. To sum up, such i...

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