Ielts task 1 - 11/5/2019

Question

  The line graph demonstrates the percentage of car owned in the UK over the period of 30 years starting in 1975

   Looking at the graph, it is clear that the car own ship in UK generally increased. However, the household with 1 car made up the highest proportion compared to another item

   In 1975, there are 30% household without a car. This figure the decreased steadily to roughly 18%. Beside that, the 2 and 3 cars own ship figure witnessed a gradual increase from 7 % and 3% to roughly 17% and 8% respectively.

   Meanwhile, the percentage of British households having 1 car stood in the highest level of approximately 42% in 1975. This figure, despire a drop of about 5% in 1985, regained its upward to 40% in 2005

 

Answer 1

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The line graph demonstrates the percentage of car owned in the UK over the period of 30 years starting in 1975

   Looking at the graph, it is clear that the car own ship car ownership in the UK [p1] generally increased. However, the household with 1 car made up the highest proportion compared to another item[p2]

   In 1975, there are 30% household [p3] without a car. This figure the decreased steadily to roughly 18%. Beside that, the 2 and 3 cars own ship ownership figure witnessed a gradual increase from 7 % and 3% to roughly 17% and 8% respectively.

   Meanwhile, the percentage of British households having 1 car stood in the highest level of approximately 42% in 1975. This figure, despire despite a drop of about 5% in 1985, regained its upward [p4] to 40% in 2005.

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 [p1]Vocabulary Error: Whenever refer the country of UK -> Add “the” -> “the UK”

 [p2]Vocabulary Error: “household with cars” is not “item”

-> “compared to other household types”

 [p3]Grammar Error: 1^st – Write in the past

2^nd – Were -> Households

-> “there were 30% households without a car”

 [p4]Vocabulary Error: “upward – Adjective”

-> “Adjective + Noun”

-> “regained its upward trend/tendency to 40% in 2005”

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CRITERIA	GRADE	COMMENT
Task Response	6	addresses the requirements of the task (Academic) presents an overview with information appropriately selected (General Training) presents a purpose that is generally clear; there may be inconsistencies in tone presents and adequately highlights key features/bullet points but details may be irrelevant, inappropriate or inaccurate
Coherence and Cohesion	6	arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
Lexical Resource	6	uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication
Grammatical Range and Accuracy	6	uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication
Overall	6