#HELPMEPLEASE - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - CULTURE

Question

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cutural differences. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

These days, travelling abroad has been in vogue. Many people believe that tourists should follow the culture and traditon of the country they set foot on, whereas others think that the host country should be the one who embraces other different cultures. In my opinion, both visitors and local habitants should show mutual respect and welcome to both sides.

It is essential for holidaymakers to follow local customs and behaviour. Firstly, the custom and tradition of a nation is the things which have existed for ages and have been passed down from generations to generations. Therefore, when travelling to a new land, visitors should try to adopt its culture and fully become part of a different society to avoid causing offence to locals and even becoming a social misfit. For example, when having meals with Vietnamese, westerners should learn to invite the senior before eating and learn to use chopsticks instead of asking for a spoon or a fork. Secondly, customs and behavior are things which have shaped the local identity and show who they are. As a result, complying with local custom is a good way to attain more knowledge of the country and its people.

On the other hand, the host country should also welcome cultural differences. Clearly, it would be hard for residents of a country to accept cultures that they have never exposed to. Granted, trying to welcome customs and tradition from different nations could help the country to integrate into the globe. Furthermore, variety is the spice of life. Thanks to new cultures that travellers bring to the host country, its culture would be diversified, creating a more interesting cosmopolitian environment in the nation. Hence, local citizens could increase their blending abilities which would be helpful for them when travelling abroad.

In conclusion, i believe that while the host country should always accept exotic cultures from all over the world, tourists should also remember to follow local tradition because both sides are all benefited.

 

Answer 1

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Overall, your essay is good. To improve, you should use more grammar structures and vocabulary to avoid some repeating words. Also, you should spend more time planning your ideas.

 

 

CRITERIA	GRADE	COMMENT
Task Achievement	7.0	• addresses all parts of the task • presents a clear position throughout the response • presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
Coherence and Cohesion	7.0	• logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout • uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use • presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
Lexical Resource	7.0	• uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision • uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation • may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
Grammatical Range and Accuracy	7.5	• uses a variety of complex structures • produces frequent error-free sentences • has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
Overall	7.0	Overall, your essay is good. To improve, you should use more grammar structures and vocabulary to avoid some repeating words. Also, you should spend more time planning your ideas.

 

 

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