IELTS TASK 2:Some people say that most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Question

It is believed that serious issues can be tackled by the power of the international cooperation. While I agree with that statement, I could argue that international cooperation isn’t the only route to deal with such problems.

On the one hand, that nations cooperate with each others has considerably contributed to a number of worldwide issues solved. For example, a few years ago, some species of animals such as rhinoceros, jaguar, dolphin and so on were on the brink of extinction. Howerver, thanks to the strict regulations timely exposed by the government in several countries and ‘Give a hand to save our globe’ campaigns that were strongly supported by the people all over the world, these animals were saved. In other words, there are difficulties that seems to be solved by merely the actions of many nations at the same time.

On the other hand, each coutries have to take responsibility of dealing with their own concerns. It is true that every nations have some urgent issues, for which both their government and residents have to work together with a view to searching out the effective solutions, instead of depending on being lifted up by others. Furthermore, making relentless efforts to struggle with problems in a variety of fields like economy, finance, agriculture can lead to a stable and flourishing country because of the fact that it has enough abilities to successfully overcome those challenges.

In conclusion, international cooperation seems to be of importance in tackling global matters, but there are others, especially which are internal, can be handled by the contribution of a nation only.v

Answer 1

Chào bạn, mìng cũng đang luyện viết các bài luận. Mình cũng đã đọc bài của bạn, sau đây là những đóng góp nhỏ của mình.

1. Cụm "on the brink of extinction." ==>> Mình thấy hay dùng "on the verge of extinction."

2. Từ "It" ngay cuối đoạn 2 mình thấy nên thay đổi để người đọc hiểu rõ hơn là từ đó thay thế cho cụm nào trước đó.

3. Từ "tackling" ở ngay đoạn cuối cũng có thể dùng từ "addressing" cho đa dạng từ.

Chào bạn, mong nhân phải hồi từ bạn.