writing task 2

Question

Some people say that school children should be mainly taught about the literature (eggs fiction and poetry) of their own country because it is more important than that of other countries. To what extent do you agree?

Some people contend that teaching national literatures in school children more important than teaching international literatures. I would like to express my contradiction to this claim and to support my view, several reasons are outlined in this essay.

Let me begin by pointing out that school children should be taught about international literatures because it is also play an important part in developing and raising an awareness of children about different cultures around the world and express through particular literacies. To make more  clearly, international literatures such as "The last leaf" by O'Henry or "The Old man and the Sea" by Hemingway educate children about how people from other countries view sacrifice as well as the success and failure in life. As a result it is likely to be easier for the children to integrate and also create excitement and curiosity about the cultures in different nations.

We also cannot deny the fact that teaching international literatures would build up the diversification in approaching litaracies. Students would not feel boring when learning literature which concentrate too much on national literacies, it can be seen that international literatures would make the excitement and easliy to get motivation of all students. So that students will love this subject. Let me take an example, Harry Potter is one of the greatest literatures inspired everyone not only the symbolizations but also eliciting the love of reading books and studying literatures.

It is therefore safe to say that teaching international literature would help the students have an opportunity to acquire different cultures around the world and the excitement and motivation in learning literature.

Answer 1

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Some people contend that teaching national literatures =>literature ( uncount noun nhé)  in school children are more important than teaching international literatures=>literature ( uncount noun nhé) ( Không hiểu ý bạn câu này). I would like to express my contradiction ( từ này ko phù hợp rồi nhé)  to this claim and to support my view, several reasons are outlined in this essay.

Let me begin by pointing out that school children should be taught about international literatures =>literature ( uncount noun nhé) because it is also play an important part => role in developing and raising an awareness of children about different cultures around the world and express through particular literacies =>literature . To make more  clearly, international literatures =>literature such as "The last leaf" by O'Henry or "The Old man and the Sea" by Hemingway educate children about how people from other countries view sacrifice as well as the success and failure in life. As a result it is likely to be easier for the children to integrate and also create excitement and curiosity about the cultures in different nations.

We also cannot deny the fact that teaching international literatures  =>literature would build up the diversification in approaching litaracies =>literature . Students would not feel boring when learning literature which concentrate too much on national literacies =>literature , it can be seen that international literatures =>literature would make the excitement and easliy hai từ phải là 1 loại từ nhé to get motivation of all students. So that students will ( bạn nên thống nhất 1 will 2 would hết nhé) love this subject. Let me take an example, Harry Potter is one of the greatest literatures =>literature inspired everyone not only the symbolizations but also eliciting the love of reading books and studying literatures  =>literature . 

It is therefore safe to say that teaching international literature would help the students have an opportunity to acquire different cultures around the world and the excitement and motivation in learning literature.

Comments

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Bài nay theo mình thì chưa ổn. Lỗi ngữ pháp và triển khai ý của bạn chưa logic. Còn chấm band mấy thì mình chịu, ở forum Ieltsplanet mấy bạn nó mới chấm band điểm cho mỗi bài viết mà còn phí nhé. :))

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Bạn nghĩ nó ko logic chỗ nào

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Ở phần mở bài, bạn chưa có nêu rõ quan điểm của mình. Phần thân bài 1 và 2 phần idea chung chung giống nhau.

Mình đang thử viết lại bài này, khi nào xong mình mail bạn thử đọc xem nhé :))

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OK bạn. Thank you so much

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Lê Đạt, bạn thử xem bài viết của mình và góp ý nhé :))

 

People differ on a subject that whether teaching only their own literature or extending a few foreign sources of literature for children. While I agree to only teach literature in the country, I also have a positive view to add another literature in school.

On the one hand, schools add a few foreign sources of literature in their own curriculum would bring some obvious benefits. Literature of other countries help students to expose many cultures, therefore It would broaden their minds. For example, a few students go to a class and learn poetry of a French author. They surely love the poetry and interest on the author, it leads to find and read more relative information as the consequence. Look at another prospect, throughout exposing this kind of literature, students suppose to be encouraged or stimulated to learn a second or third language. 

On the other hand, if teachers or professors insert creations of foreign authors to the curriculum in early ages of student. It might bring some damages. This curriculum would overload and bore students. Therefore original purposes of adding the literature could not achieve by the student.

In conclusion, while adding literature of other countries could broaden children’s mind in many ways, the potential damage should not be ignored

 

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Mình nghĩ body 2 bạn nên có ví dụ

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Phần paragraph ở body 2 đúng là mình thiếu phần idea về ví dụ, mà kiểu bị cụt ấy bạn cho mình vài comment nhé

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Mình nghĩ bạn nên làm rõ hơn tại sao lại damage