In recent years, travel-travelling has become a broad-bạn tra lại từ điển collocation nha issue to the general public. Many people claim that the international tourism is the bad thing??? in their countries. There are a number of- several reasons behind this view and several solutions should be adopted by the government and individuals to boost the situation. - khuyên bạn là đọc bài dạng two-question và viết lại cho thích hợp và tránh lặp từ nha.^o^
On the one hand, there are two primary reasons why the international tourism is the bad thing in their country(lặp). The first reason is that many tourists hurt tourism-each other. For example, tourists throw garbage rash in Sam Son beach( vd k liên quan đến câu trước. The second reason is that many tourists wear shorts, miniskirt and disturb order when they go to the temple, which can be badly affected on children's behaviours. In addition, children are affected by their way dressed.
Đoạn vặn này ý lủng củng, không thuyết phục, viết quá ngắn gọn
On the other hand, several measures could be taken to prevent có thể thay là tackle , address.. this problem. The first solution would change negative attitude by the local people??? là solution j . For example, If countries have many tourists, it will experience a phenomenal growth of the economy. A second measure would be the government should transmit for residents about both developed economy and a boost to tourism. vd quá là k liên quan và k cm dc Besides that, tourist also creates jobs for us có thể viết là tourism opens up many oppotunities for people to have a job. Furthermore, travel agencies recommend that tourists should respect their traditional culture. For instance, tourists are responsible for garbage. mình nghĩ là cái này k xem là ví dụ dc. muốn ví dụ cm vế trc thì fai nói là các đại lý du lịch đó recommend cái j ,,
In conclusion, it is clear that there are không nên lạm dụng từ này quá nhiều)various reasons for the international tourism is the bad thing in their countrylặp and steps need to be taken to tackle this problem.the government should take steps to address this problem before it gets worse.
Bài viết rất tệ ( sorry) bạn nên đọc văn mẫu nhiều hơn và sử dụng từ more flexible để tránh lặp và viết nhiều cấu trúc hơn, những luận điểm fai rõ ràng và những vd cm cho nó thì fai liên quan ^O^ cố gắng lên nha
P/s nhiều câu không pk sửa làm sao nên bôi đỏ thôi ^_^