These days, children tend to spend a great deal of time playing computer games. Some believe this is a beneficial trend while others think it is detrimental.Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Question

Many people, and children, in particular, enjoy playing computer games. While I accept that these games can sometimes have a positive effect on the user, I believe that they are more likely to have a harmful impact.

On the one hand, video games can be both entertaining and educational. Users, or gamers, are transported into virtual worlds which are often more exciting and challenging than real-life pastimes. From an educational perspective, these games encourage each user's imagination and creativity, as well as concentration, logical thinking and problem solving, all of which are useful skills outside the gaming context. Furthermore, it has been shown that computer simulation games can improve users’ motor skills and help to prepare them for real-world tasks, such as flying a plane, preparing foods, etc.

However, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks. Gaming can be highly addictive because users are constantly given scores, new targets and frequent rewards to keep them playing. Many children now spend hours each day trying to progress through the levels of a game or to get a higher score than their friends. This type of addiction can have effects ranging from lack of sleep to problems at school when homework is being sacrificed for more than a few more hours on the computer or console or PS, etc. The rise in obesity in recent years has also been linked in part to the sedentary lifestyle and lack of exercise that often accompany gaming addiction.

In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of video games are more significant than the possible benefits. Therefore, each of us has to play computer games with care and we may find it not as harmful as we have thought. 

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