Studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or studying at traditional schools?

Question

There are many ways to learn such as studying at schools, on TV, on the Internet, studying from others,... Each way has its own advantages and disadvantages but in my opinion, learning at traditional school is better because at schools, you will have an good studying environment and opportunity to communicate and exchange to everyone.

 

     Firstly, when studying at schools, you will have an directed communication environment to everybody. You can meet and exchange everything fast and effectively with your teachers and friends. Interaction with others will increase your experiences and skills. When you study at home, you have no chance to interchange ideas with others and you will become passive.

 

     On the other hand, at traditional schools, there are a lot of knowledge for you. Teachers play an important part in students' studying. They always orientate truly for their students. Beside the knowledge in the books, teachers also provide students one in the society, the life skills and morality to become the good citizens. So we can't deny the importance of the teachers as well as of the school.

 

    To conclude, modern society will provide us more choices to study. However, we must always appreciate the role of the teachers and the schools in students' studying.

Answer 1

Theo ý kiến của mình:

- ko nên dùng dấu "..." trong bài IELTS

- nếu bạn dùng ON THE OTHER HAND thì đoạn Body 1 nên thóng nhất dùng ON THE ONE HAND ^^

- Số lượng câu trong đoạn nên tăng thêm chút tầm 5-6 câu hợp lí hơn đó ^^ trong 1 đoạn có tầm 2 idea chính support cho topic thì tốt hơn đó ^^

- ko viết tắt "can"t "

Comments

thank you ^^